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Somebody's Watching Me

By WritingtheWeird

Thriller / Romance

First Encounter

Somebody's Watching Me

Bella's human but Edward's not. One night, while Bella's at Charlie's by herself, she sees someone staring at her outside. When she goes outside, they're not there anymore. After many more of these surprising and scary sightings, she finally meets the mystery known to her only as Edward. He leaves cryptic notes on her pillow. When she finally does meet him, he's not as he had seemed. Instead, he's brutal and rude, or at least he is when his brother's near. So how is it, that these two completely differently people will find one thing in common? Their love for each other.

(Edward's POV)

I was out hunting when I came across her scent. It was the most exhilarating and terrifying thing I had ever smelled in my time as a vampire. Slowly, I seeked out her bodily form. When I came upon her appearance, I almost gasped. By now her scent was almost overpowering my self control. Her beautiful brown hair cascaded down her shoulders. Her matching eyes were filled with confusion and anger. She wore a simple light blue shirt, jeans, and black converses. It took everything I had not to pounce her and drink the blood running through her.

Again I gasped, shocked at my unnatural thoughts. I had never drank a humans blood and had never wanted to. I had always believed it would make me more of the monster I already was. Yet this one girl, this one human, had tempted me to betray my beliefs with one whiff of her blood. Unknowingly, she had gained control of my temptations. I growled at the thought.

Why should I let such a weak being control what I do? I decided to punish her, even if unjustified. I crept behind her silently, hiding in the evening shadows. Then purposely, I snapped a twig. The girl jumped and turned in the sounds direction. Suddenly a thrill began to sneak upon me. I moved to the opposite side and snapped another twig. Again the girl turned. Gone was the anger in her eyes, instead there was fear. The dark part of my mind enjoyed that I had caused such fear in a defenseless animal. Then a terrifying idea came to me.

What if I killed her? What if I drank her delicious blood? No one would miss her very much, she's new to town. The idea made me creep closer, my mouth already open. I imagined myself sneaking up behind her, covering those beautiful brown eyes and trapping her against me. Then I'd move her hair away from her neck, posing my mouth for the perfect final bite. My teeth would pierce her skin, drawing in the most tantalizing blood I have ever tasted. My eyes would close as I relished in her screams of pain.

It was then that I opened my eyes, realizing I had drawn closer. Now I was standing directly behind her, in the same position as I had imagined. Her breathing was rapid and coming in short jagged breaths.

"Please…don't hurt me. I'll do anything." She asked under her breath. At this all of my strength seemed to disappear. I remembered saying those same words when I was turned. I remember the same feeling of fear and not knowing what was going to happen. If I hated it so much myself, how could I force that pain on another person? How could I be so cruel?

I dropped my arms and stepped away quickly back into the shadows. Slowly the girl turned to face me, but I ran before she caught a glimpse. Before I was out of earshot, I heard her whisper one last thing.

"Thank you."


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