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The Tale of Araja

By Merij_Kris All Rights Reserved ©

Adventure / Fantasy

Unforeseen Betrayal

All of us stood on edge, watching Malfeiya as her blood pooled over the ground and down into the depths of the earth. Down through the crevice that Erythnul was thrusted into. The screams of the evil being cursed her name as he became bound once more to the depths of his prison. Once the needed blood was spilt, the opening in the earth sealed up, silencing Erythnul's wrath. Malfeiya then fell to the earth, dead.

For a brief moment my heart went out to her. How awful her situation was. Malfeiya had saved the mortal plain from Erythnul’s evil reign. No longer will folk be marked in the future and hence prevented from being Exalted. Even the folk there, who witnessed the sealing, seemed heart broken that their savior was dead.

Alas, like I said, my heart for a moment went out to her. No sooner had she fallen to the earth of the mortal plane, the change began. I watched the light stream forth from her body, her wings grow, and her wardrobe change into the white dress of the newly Exalted. My blood ran cold as I watched the horror take place before me. I could hear rejoicing all around at the miracle that took place, but no rejoicing came from me. Rather the purist form of hatred, the most piercing pain of betrayal coursed through my veins.

Why would she be Exalted!? She was MARKED!! And no marked being was allowed in the Kingdom!

I looked around for Him. What had Heironious allowed!? Why would He allow her and not my sister!?

I barely caught sight of Him and in His face I could see some concern, as though He knew I remembered what He had told me and I had caught Him in His lie. Caught Him breaking one of His unbending rules!

“Heironious!” I shouted. I’m sure I drew quite the attention in that moment, but before things could escalate there, I was suddenly in His court. All of the doors were shut and the curtains drawn.

“What have you done!” I exclaimed accusingly.

“Araja, let me explain,” Heironious began. His voice was calm and soothing.

“So you can tell me more lies?”

“I’ve never lied to you Araja.”

“Then why was she Exalted!? You said no one marked was allowed!”

“That’s what I want to explain,” Heironious said more sternly, “There is more to her than you can understand-”

“Of course," I said mockingly, "So much that the rules are an exception to her! That doesn’t make right what you’ve allowed! The mark is evil Heironious! Have you forgotten? That reason alone was why you said my sister, who was marked for less than a minute, couldn’t be Exalted! My sister who was more good than me!” I shouted. My anger enveloped me, covering myself in a protective blanket of rage.

“I understand your concern, but are you ready to listen?” Heironious asked calmly. Blinded by my fury, I wasn’t about to listen to what I knew were lies to convince me otherwise.

“No!" I snarled, "Heironious, this is the one thing I can’t forgive. The one thing I can’t ignore!” I paused. There was a thought in my mind that said ‘what you’re about to say will be crossing the line and you will regret it once out,’ but I knew that it would be effective in getting back at Him.

I eyed Heironious daringly, forgetting that He was my creator and therefore more powerful than I. However my rage gave me the courage to state my mind for I knew I was right.

“From how I see it, you're no better than Erythnul.”

Heironious’s whole frame went rigged. I knew I had struck Him to the core and I wanted Him to feel my pain! I crossed the line of no return and would make Him pay! Expose Him if I had to!

“You won't get away with this. I will reveal your vile ways if it's the last thing I do-” I began to say before my mouth was silenced. I couldn’t move my tongue or my lips. The very attempt at making a sound was impossible. The courage my rage gave me fled, fear filling it's place as Heironious grew to His full height. I closed my eyes as I prepared for my end.

“Get. Out,” He said firmly. I opened my eyes, confused by the firmness that was without malice. He was letting me go?

My hesitation put Heironious over the edge, “I said GET. OUT!” With those thundering words ringing in my head I felt myself being pulled away. The force picked up speed and before I knew it I could see myself plummeting to the surface of the mortal plane. Tears streamed from my eyes out of anger as I looked to what must be my impending death. Obviously I was right and here He was destroying me before I could inform the others.

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