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Something's Wrong Up There

By itsnotnatural All Rights Reserved ©

Fantasy / Humor

Untitled Chapter

"door opens"
Angel #1: Hey, come in here, look!
"door closes"
Angel #2: Wow! So this is the control room?
Angel #1: Looks like it! Hey I wonder what this does?
Angel #2: Well, let's see!
"click"
"boom"
Both: Cool!!
Angel #2: I wonder what this monitor does?
"screen follows a man who finds a $100 bill"
Angel #1: Good for him.
"angel #2 presses yet another button"
"screen appears to shake when both realize they just made an earthquake"
Both: Awesome!
"they watch as part of a building falls"
Angel #1: Didja see that?!
Angel #2: Yeah! That guy just went splat!
"door suddenly crashes open"
God: What in the he- I mean what in heaven's name are you two doing?!
Both: Uh, nothing.
God: I just got a call from St Peter. Someone unexpectedly died just now, and then I come here and I see you two messing about in the control room. Think of what you just done. Not only have you saddened the lives of those close to him, but this is going to cause a psychological ripple that not even I can control. Thanks to you, we now have to make up a new plan for these people while they go about their business. It's going to be completely unpredictable! Do this again and I swear you two will become fallen angels, Jebediah and Thaspiel.
"God pulls them out of the room by their ears and puts each back into bed"

God: "sigh" those two are always causing trouble for me. I thought I raised them well.
Gabriel: No need to blame yourself, they are who they are.
God: Shut UP, and leave me in peace.
Gabriel: Fine, jeez. (does he have to be such a hothead?)
God: I heard that!
"Gabriel runs off"
God: What am I gonna do with those two?
"as God tries to find an answer he slowly drifts off to sleep"
"God wakes up a little while later to find both angels looking over at him"
God: What do you want?
Jebediah: What happened to Mom?
God: Well, uh... you both have different mothers so I'll do you first Jebediah. Your mother died giving birth to you. Your mother Thaspiel, became a fallen angel soon after. You want to know why I treat you like I do?
Both: Huh?
God: Because I'm your father.
Thaspiel: That means we're brothers?
God: half-brothers, along with every other angel here in Heaven. Either half-sister or half-brother, Son.
Both: Holy SHIT!

"God is still stuck in his thoughts"
Man: hello, God.
God: Who are you?
Man: An observer. I lived life as a mortal to see how your little world was doing and to check on you. You failed God, you failed.
God: What do you mean I failed?
Man: You failed the test, and thus we are bringing you back.
God: Why?
Man: Because, the cake is a lie.
God: WHAT?!
Man: Also you are now officially a failed experiment from the 17th dimension.
God: I'm an experiment?
Man: Yes, and we are bringing you back to be replaced.
God: But, that means everything I did...
Man: Will be all for nothing, I know. Temporarily, all universes in this dimension will cease to exist until someone can work on it just a little bit better than you. Now please come with me.
God: but...
Man: Now!
" they walk a little distance and disappear as Jebediah and Thaspiel watch"
Jebediah: What just happened?
Thaspiel: I have no idea.
Jebediah: Want to go into the control room again?
Thaspiel: Sure!

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