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Immortal Treasure !

By JDAsh All Rights Reserved ©

Adventure / Fantasy

Chapter 1

This tale revolves around a character that embodies the illusion found much in our world.This illusion may change your life upside-down if sufficient awareness and contentment were not available for a moment before realizing remorse.

Many of us have always imagined be living another life, a life where comfort and tranquility, a life without fatigue , discomfort, or perhaps a life where you sleep without hearing the next door kid`s nuisance. This was the same feeling that has been generated with the hero of our story after attending a high school alumni reunion. Our protagonist is a scientist with a typical intelligence. He was not satisfied with his life, although he had been living a prosperous life . He believes that his life worth is more than it is now, he deserves a better life, more than anyone else.This was the first and the beginning of the loss of a key stone in the game of life.

Then , a thought of a machine to simulate the mind , that portrays a person`s fiction world, a world that one wishes to live in it, in sum "DREAMLAND".

After completing the machine , he left the life of reality and everything behind his back to move to his the world of dreams , sat on the chair of the machine , nodded his head and began delivering the machine wires to his body to start his new life. When he closed his eyes to let the machine starts translating his mind signs , images of his fantasy world in front of him gradually began to appear . A wondrous life , another world was in front of him , a world not watched, but in his waking dreams just begun. A world where appreciation ,money, fame, and fans who had dreamed of, just obtained.

He could not believe that he lives in a world where there is no place for problems . All problems that suffers a lot disappeared at once. He has thought that he would never get tired , and he lives in the reality that this is what is , this is what really worth. But also, this what he has created for.

Many days and weeks passed , and he lives in a state of absolute happiness , nothing could expressed. But after a while , a strange feelings start touching his heart, and that happiness has gradually started to dwindle . The marvelous life where nothing wrong seemed wrong.

The sense of which had possessed since the start of the experiment , when equivalent to money or admiration began to change.The feeling that he lives in paradise began to disappear and he doesn't know why or how it happened .

He began to feel apathy , boredom and nervousness. He tried to resist this new feeling repeatedly , but then old memories seeped into him . The world that he detests the most , the world that he escaped from, began coming to his mind again. Idyllic that was hoped throughout his life , which in his hands now seemed a real mirage , an illusion in which he lived . Herein , decided to return to where he was. The real world where differences would confer the life a taste. Then , he closed his eyes and imagined his return , but nothing changed when he opened it.

He re-tried over and over hoping to change anything, but nothing change at all. Then he realized that the way he came by cannot help his return , and owned by a despair that stopped his attempts to return. After several days he decided to endeavor again , but he couldn't , it was impossible. Suddenly and without notice , he felt nauseous , dizziness and bouts of severe headache , then he fell to the ground unconscious. The fantasy world`s images began to scatter and disappear gradually .Voices calling him, crying and crowing from afar. He opened his eyes and his family surrounding him were the first he saw.

" He is breathing ! " , " Thank God" , " Are you alright?!", " Can you hear us ?" .. they asked.

He could not believe , it was incredible! He had returned .

He rose from his bed , " I returned ! , I returned " .. he shouted.

Exclamation and fear was visible on the eyes of everyone who was in the room. After explaining what happened and what he saw to his family , he decided to destroy the machine and thank God for his return to where he was. During the destruction of device ,he was grateful that the machine does not work since the beginning and that all he saw was a dream helped him to grasp the fact. The beauty of whatever situation in which he lives. He can work hard to change it, without changing any of those who love .He realized in the end that what he got is the best.

Aim of the story :

Conviction is a treasure not to deny!

….. The End …..


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