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the eclipse

By the ancient arrow17 All Rights Reserved ©

Fantasy / Romance

Chapter 1

I was out of breath.

I tired to resist my tears as I looked around at the crossed staked bodies.

The moon shaped scars burned against my skin.My apprentice Pisicora, jumped from the emerald tree tops ."this way!" she shouted in her rapsy voice as she double flipped onto the next branch.

I Shot my arrows to the remaining surivors,

the looked at me with betrayal in their eyes,

but there was nothing i could do to save them,

there were others i couldn't. it was just better this way. To end killing them all . Because i lost what i really needed, and i had no foresight to continue.

The sirens call echoed through the dead woods ,

and fire burned the village around us. The Goliaths were here.

More and more of them arrived, their eyes dripping dark blue and their roars shook the grounds of Capricorn .

"Danchis seritkor" I Screamed into my hoarse voice . A yellow light combined with green took hold of my hands.

A uncontrollable burst of power shot from me. And the goliaths shielded themselves with dark metal armor.

I called out another spell, as the light kept shooting through the shields. I heard a voice scream out my name .

"Mari" Mari" you... don't understand you'll kill me ". The giant before me screamed as his fleshed burned with wounds . Smoked engulfed him so i was unable to see . His blood began seeping around him like tears.

I saw my only love before me ,

Riding.

I Cried as i struck him for the last time,

and as he fell dead,

i knew that in this world

A thump fell to the floor as the last Goliath collapsed.

was not the place i would live happy in the end .

that was my life as a raider,as it had always been

i was

the raider grim of Capricorn.

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