{{ contest.story_page_sticky_bar_text }} Be the first to recommend this story.
Get Free Copy

96 free copies left

This novel is limited to 100 free copies due to its part in Inkitt’s Novel Contest.

0
Free copy left
You can read our best books
doyoulov would love your feedback! Got a few minutes to write a review?
Write a Review

The other end of the spectrum

By doyoulov All Rights Reserved ©

Other / Fantasy

A deep breath

“It’s not that hard, just hold your breath.”

“Says you.” Gold eyes wandered nervously from the glassy surface above to the sheltered rocks below. The first one reached up and cupped a hand full of air drawing it down. She watched as bubbles slipped from her fingers and returned up. The second stroked his tail, still undecided.

“What if I panic and swallow it?!”

The first one laughed and cuffed him gently with her tail. She enjoyed the way the sun caught the red in it as it moved through the water.

" I promise I will bring you back down. You know mermaids are made out of 85% air”

He rolled his eyes, that was her opinion, not facts.

“what if pops finds out?” he asked. She cast a doubt full glance down. Unlike her brother, the rocks below did not have the same comforting feel for her. Maybe it was because she was feeling the usual teenage feelings of constraint, I don’t know. She shrugged.

“It’s beautiful once you learn how to hold your breath.”

He filled his lungs with water and then stuck his head out. For the first time he could actually fill the sun’s rays. Colors seem to explode over everything. Everything seemed clear and bright and different. Overhead the sky stretched out for what seemed like forever; what looked like dainty white seaweed floated across it. The birds that he had only seen diving in the water to plunder his mother’s pet fish, now glided right beside the white seaweed. Thier cries filled the air. With a splash one landed beside him causing him to gasp.....a lung full of air. He started to panic and swallowed more air. Her hand rose up and grabbed hold of him, yanking back to the safety of the water. He choked and gagged, while she swam around him troubled, giving very unhelp slaps on the back with her tail. Whoever came up with the idea of pounding someone on the back while the person is choking was an idiot. Finally, he caught his breath, but before a word could be said by any of them a voice bellowed out from below.

“Children!” They flinched and exchanged very guilty smiles.

“Let’s do it again later!” He whispered. She nodded, hoping that they would not be grounded for long as they swam down to meet their father.

Write a Review Did you enjoy my story? Please let me know what you think by leaving a review! Thanks, doyoulov
Get Free Copy
0
Free copy left
You can read our best books
Further Recommendations

Felisa Yoder Osburn: I really enjoyed the story. Civil War stories are some of my favorites and the intertwining of the past with current times was wonderful. I look forward to reading the next stories.

spooky jedi: Love your story!I really hope more people read this story!Its amazing!! The plot is very unique and different, which is very good to have in a world full of stories. You have very complex and intellectual plot line, with your many loveable character and that hint of 'will they, won't they' is ju...

ernbelle: When I first started this story I was a little unsettled by all of the information that appears in the prologue, and wasn't sure if I would continue. However, I am very glad I did. The plot was very well thought out and really interesting. There were not any page breaks or markers to acknowledge ...

Mourn8220House: When first reading "Avarice," I thought it would be another fairytale but I was taken back the author's approach and choice of ending. There is little to be said for the story and overall plot besides the sudden twists and speculation, other than that I do not want to ruin a fantastic tale, you m...

Catherine Kopf: Wow! This was a really great story. I really enjoy reading fantasy, so it didn't take long for me to become invested in the book and its characters like Jacob. I really liked your writing style, and it seemed to flow very well. The descriptions that you used for your world were also created n...

Bri Hoffer: I couldn't put it down!! The characters are all incredibly likable, and it's so descriptive you can see, smell, and feel thier surroundings. Great story, and very well written. I cannot wait for follow up stories. there were a few grammatical errors, but nothing that I could move right over.

carla1234: I couldn't stop reading this book once I started! it was brilliant! I loved it and I would love to buy it. Although if you could make a more eye-catching synopsis, I would suggest you please do.I loved how everything came together in this novel. everyone, even people not involved in the main stor...

Laraine Smith: You are a true artist! You should do this for a living! I love the imagery here! It is magical! You are magical!

Hudson: Your story was fantastic Erin! The Rising Sun was one of the first stories I read on Inkitt, and I have to say I don't regret the three to four days I spent pouring through the story.Probably the biggest strength I see in your writing is your characterisation of Eliana, Oriens, and the rest of th...

More Recommendations

Krupa Kataria: the detailing is really awesome ....the characters, ur plots jst too Awsm ,m waiting for the further chapters please do complete it ...like m really craving for those ones ...great job with words too ..please complete the further parts ...

makaylakay: I love love this story! It's written incredibly and well thought-out plot! I love how it's a different twist in fantasy fiction, other then the usual vampire or werewolves. Love the romantics and drawn to the two characters so much already! This book will draw you in within the first chapter and ...

JWalker: I loved this story from start to finish! It flows at a really nice pace and the story world feels so real. The fight sequences are a treat especially when Isanfyre is training to become a warrior. I found the names really cool and thankfully easy to pronounce. Personally I have always struggled w...

Erin Crowley: The concept here is really strong, but the execution is definitely lacking. Tenses, grammar, etc are all off, with at least one or more errors per 'Page' on my phone. The writing style is almost broken- sentences move into each other awkwardly, and are filled with an excess of "filler words", lik...

About Us:

Inkitt is the world’s first reader-powered book publisher, offering an online community for talented authors and book lovers. Write captivating stories, read enchanting novels, and we’ll publish the books you love the most based on crowd wisdom.