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Entrapment! The Witch's Tent

By Nigel Murphy All Rights Reserved ©

Fantasy / Adventure

Chapter 1

Julie and Eva jostled together near the front of the small four-person tent. In front of them their teacher, Miss Andrea O'Brien, tugged and pulled furiously at the front fastener in an attempt to try and get it open. She huffed and grunted.
"Come on! Open!" she muttered.
Eva gasped suddenly as she looked down at herself.
"What is it Eva?" Miss O'Brien asked concerned. "Are you okay?"
"Emm....Yes....I'm okay Miss!" replied Eva rather hurriedly.
Miss O'Brien then lowered her voice and spoke gently.
"If there's a problem Eva, you know that you can.....Ohh! My Goodness!"
Miss O'Brien grabbed a nearby towel.
"Here use this." she sighed.
"Thanks Miss but I don't know if yopu've noticed it but you seemed to have just....you know....'let go'.?!"
"What on earth do you mean Eva?"
Eva pointed.
Miss O'Brien looked down and gasped in horror.
Julie giggled and pointed.
"It's not funny, Julie." rebuked Miss O'Brien.
"Don't mind her Miss." Eva replied. "She's always causing some form of trouble or other."
Julie continued to giggle but then the exact same thing happened to her. She let out a few profanities which Miss O'Brien then frowned on.
"Thats not very lady-like Julie." she said sternly.
Julie just continued to ignore her. Miss O'Brien signed and shook her head.
"What about that zipper then, Miss?" Eva chimed in.
"Oh...yes Eva. Thank you for reminding me. Now let's see if we can get that zip open...."
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Outside the tent, just a few feet away, stood the evil fairly queen, Gildemna. With a raven perched on her left shoulder, she had a wicked smile on her face.
She cackled.
"Perfect! Now then Andrea O'Brien! I've finally got you exactly where I want you! After all these years you won't humiliate me anymore! Time to tighten screws even further."
She put her raven on her hand and placed a small vial of magical dust in its beak.
"Fly my beauty." she commanded. "Sprinkle that growth dust all over that tent and we will have some new animal slaves to serve us!".
With that, the raven almost effortlessly took to the sky.
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Back inside the tent, Miss O'Brien made one final attempt to try and undo the the front zip....but then it broke much to their dismay.
"Oh that's just wonderful Miss! Now you've trapped us in here!" exclaimed Julie.
But Miss O'Brien didn't reply.
"What is it Miss? You seem to be a little distracted." Eva inquired.
"Something's coming! I can sense it!" Miss O'Brien replied almost absentmindedly.
"What exactly does she mean 'something is coming', then?" Julie demanded to know.
"You know as much as I do, Julie." Eva shrugged.
But before Julie could reply, all three of them suddenly began to grow.
They all gasped as they all felt their clothes tighten up on them.
"What's going on here?!" Julie yelled in panic.
"I don't know!" cried Eva. "But I've got a feeling that something's gonna burst!"
Miss O'Brien put her right arm up to the roof of the tent.
No sooner had the words escaped from Eva's lips, then material began to shred and tear itself from their clothes.
Miss O'Brien stopped what she had been doing. She felt her chest blow up even more than it already had done up to this point. The remaining buttons struggled desperately to hold themselves together but eventually let go. From underneath, came a sudden flash of prickly, rusty-brown clumps of fur. She grunted; with every second becoming more and more animal-like."
From that point onwards, all hell broke loose as various shirt and skirt seams either strained, split or snapped. Buttons popped and pinged. Material ripped and shredded as the tent desperately strained to hold itself together. But this proved to be a fruitless exercise. One by one the ropes snapped. It became inevitable that it would collapse at any point........

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