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I have no memories of a beginning. There is no beginning.
I existed in a warm void, an abyss of love and assurance, where all was right and good. There was only one Voice that called to us, and it was all we needed.
There was no form, or shape, or purpose, until called. When called we would become what was needed and with a glad heart go forth to accomplish the missions of our Father.
We could do nothing else.
I had no name. I had no sex. I had no sense of self. None was needed. We were joined by spirit, and there was no individuality to introduce chaos. We were one but many. We existed only to serve.
And I was content.
“You have been summoned, out of your brethren, for this course.”
“For this purpose you have been given form. A human form. Learn it well. You will be existing as such for the duration. You must abide.”
“I shall abide, Elder.”
“A key has been found in the Great Battle. A key that the enemy must not take. You will protect this key, protect his soul, for the duration of his days. The life of a human is but fleeting. You will not have to endure long.”
“It is of no moment, Elder.”
“Ah, yes. You have never served in this form. It will be difficult to adjust. You will know pain, and hunger. You will know longing, and desire. You must abide. Do not let it sway your purpose.”
“Our Father’s love will sustain me, Elder.”
She (for the form was definitely female) gazed around her with newly-formed eyes. The palatial room seemed to be entirely carved from a mountain of alabaster. All glowed with a silvery blue light beneath the large full moon which hung in an endlessly black night. Graceful columns supported a domed ceiling liberally frosted with frescoes depicting winged figures triumphant in battle against horned foes.
“Do you like it?” the Elder asked her.
“I…I believe so. It is very pretty.”
“It is done in the Greek tradition. They were proficient at naming, and gave us many, including the one we bear for humanity. This temple is to honor them, and what they gave us.”
“This is important?” This body felt strange, much different from the form she ordinarily took for battle. It was heavier, and clumsier, and strange fluids rushed through it, with even stranger processes taking place within.
“Yes. Humanity finds it important to do honor.”
“Only Father deserves honor.”
“There are degrees of honor, and you will learn this. The highest of honors is of course reserved for Father, but lesser honor can be paid to those who have earned it. Honor and respect are very important to humanity. It is all part of the test of Pride.”
“So you will be sent. Serve well. Complete your mission, and return to us whole. You will be confused and lost on many occasions, but know that we are with you, and the guiding hand of Father is ever upon you.”
She closed her new eyes, and she learned the sensation of falling.
Nymeria: Really can't get enough of this story. It flows well, it captivates the reader from page 1, and throws you into such a well-written, well conceptualized world that you'll believe it's real. Everything in the book is meshed together really well. From character backgrounds to plot twists, you can t...
Alex Rushmer: This was not what I expected, but I enjoyed it a lot Malfoy was always one of the characters that I liked a lot, so I like that a lot of this happens between him and Colette. I read the first couple chapters, and I enjoyed your writing style and am excited to see where you take this story. My com...
Flik: Hi! ^.^ huge fan of yours on ff.net! When I saw the note about this contest on The Way We Smile, I couldn't help but rush over here, create an account, and vote! XD Seriously love this story and would recommend it to anyone! :D best FT fanfiction out there. Amazing story, amazing concept that wa...
catd69: Karim is a very talented writer. When I started reading his journey it took me into the book and I was in the story till the end. I've never felt this way with any other writers stories. If you want to read a gripping adventure, this will be the one book I would suggest you pick.
Sandra Estrada: I loved every minute of it and I thank my lucky stars that brought me to the story, it's been a whirlwind of emotions, plot twist after plot twist but I never got tired of them. Abby and Kade's story is a hard one to understand but once you're submerged in their story and love, you can't help but...
Alex Reltin: This is a great story! I love how well you go into detail and emotions of Capri, and Mel. You have amazing dialogue and overall it's just a thrill to read!The only critique I could find is that some of the paragraphs should be separated. For example:-"If Nia would have just let me take the car an...
sunshinebennybear: First, I would like to address the elephant in the room. The author forgets her own character's names. She mixed up Liam for Jace, Harri for Maiya, and Freya for Clary. I love The Mortal Instruments as much as the next fangirl, but I find myself unforgiving about this. Throughout the story there ...
263Adder: Okay so I adore this story. I only knocked one star off plot for historical inaccuracies because I'm a bit of a stickler for that. The ending broke my heart though, considering you already changed history couldn't you (SPOILER) change it a bit more and have them together!!!! I want an alternative...
RodRaglin: Sounds like an interesting story, LesAnne.Here are some things you might want to consider when you revise this draft."Show don't tell." You've probably hear this before and wondered what's the difference? Well, the difference is as a writer you're telling your reader what's happening rather than ...
Hudson: Your story was fantastic Erin! The Rising Sun was one of the first stories I read on Inkitt, and I have to say I don't regret the three to four days I spent pouring through the story.Probably the biggest strength I see in your writing is your characterisation of Eliana, Oriens, and the rest of th...
FreakyPoet: "you made me laugh, made me cry, both are hard to do. I spent most of the night reading your story, captivated. This is why you get full stars from me. Thanks for the great story!"
Sara Joy Bailey: "Full of depth and life. The plot was thrilling. The author's style flows naturally and the reader can easily slip into the pages of the story. Very well done."