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The World Unseen

By Marco Cosme All Rights Reserved ©

Thriller / Fantasy

Blurb

Raiden dream all his life to be a dragon rider like his oldest brother. Now he is old enough to join the dragon rider academy. Unfortunately an attack by a dragon whose breath is fire that's cold attacks the academy. The attack kills his youngest brother and cripples him for life. Crippled and devastated he refuses to believe that his dreams are gone and that his brother is dead he returns to the ruined academy. It is their that he finds a major secret and gains the power to see creatures known as the Unseen. Now he keeps these Unseen in check while hunting for the dragon that killed his younger brother and crippled him. (Updates every Friday)

Prologue

Our world is known as Fal Monigra. It is a world of magic and elves and dragons. Unfortunately it was a time of dark ages. War, famine, plague, chaos, hatred ran deep in the plant. The planet was dying and resources were running out and all creatures of every race were killing each other for a special resource known as Magica. It was the planets life blood that kept everything alive and was a cure-all for anything. Plus when it hardens it turns into a crystal.

When that happens it is said to grant a single wish no matter how big or small it may be. A child found a small crystal of the Magica and wished for a better world. The crystal granted his wish and caused meteorites from space to collide with the planet. Thousand upon thousand of meteorite’s collided with the planet ravaging it and almost caused the extinction of all life on the planet. The meteorites rejuvenated the planet causing the Magica to flow like waterfalls saving the planet.

Although there were still bad blood the elves, dwarves and humans made a truce not to wage war with each other in return they protect the last few living dragons of fire, water, earth, and wind. This is how the first dragon riders are born. Now over 500,000 years later humans, elves, dwarves have prospered and restored each other civilizations and the dragons have multiplied and evolved granted new element of electricity, poison, and even light and darkness. The three civilization made it their top priority to avoid war and not to rely on the Magica to sustain themselves.

It was tough, but they made it and they have gone into a golden age where they don’t need the Magica unless it is absolutely necessary. Now we turn to a young adult know as Raiden. Raiden is a normal guy in a normal family and the middle child of five brothers. The oldest Victor is a celebrity rider of a earth dragon, the second oldest Richard is a researcher of a special stone that allows a dragon to transform into an even stronger version of itself, the first youngest is Bandon who is a year younger then Raiden, but old enough to be a dragon rider, and finally Bruce the youngest at a age of 10. Little does Raiden know that his dream will never come to be, but his future is of those of a hero.

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