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“Riley it’s time to go in your room now. Make sure you are quiet this time” mommy says. She looks funny, kinda like a clown. Mommy always puts stuff on her face. She says it is to make you look pretty, but I always think mommy is pretty.
“But mommy...” I try to say,
“No buts Riley. Mommy will be busy for a while.” After she shuts my door she locks it. I can hear her get the other door. I can hear her talking to someone, it sounds like him again. I wish mommy would listen to me, I need to go potty and I’m hungry. The thunder is scaring me, it is so loud. I guess I’ll just play with Lynoll, she is my best friend because she is a lion.
“Lynoll I think the bad man is here to see mommy again.” I say while jumping onto my bed giving her a hug.
Did you try to tell her what happened last time?
“I tried to tell her what he did last time, but she said I was a liar” I tell her. I wish mommy would listen to me. The bad man had come in my room last time and hit me really hard. He said I was playing too loud, and that I shouldn’t even be here. I just wanted mommy to come in and play with me, but she always falls asleep before he leaves.
“Lynoll I want to be a lion like you. You aren’t afraid of anything.”
My dear Riley you can be a lion too. All you have to do is think you are a lion. Pretend you are acting like me. You saw a lion like me once at the zoo remember? That is how you got me. Try roaring. If you roar so loud the bad man will never hurt you again. Keep trying Riley.
“Roar, roar, roar” This is so much fun, “ROAR! Oh no Lynoll, I hear him coming.”
“Hey Kid, Shut up. Your mother is sleeping” He yells and bangs on my door. I need to hide. I can’t let him find me. Where can I hide? Under the bed? No that is where he found me last time. The closet? I can hide under the dirty clothes mommy says she will wash.
“Hey kid, I know you are in there. Why don’t we have some more fun and play that game we played last time?” I can hear him unlock my door. I can’t cry, he will find me if I cry.
Be calm child, just breath. Everything will be okay as long as you keep acting like a lion. Trust me.
“Where the heck are you kid? Are you under the bed?” I can hear him walking in my room. “Huh not here, well there is only one place left.” I hear him coming closer to the closet. Lynoll please help me, keep me safe.
I will just calm down, don’t move yet. When he gets close to you, you need to roar and hit his face like he did to you.
The bad man opened the closet door, but looks funny almost like he is scared.
“What the he...”
Hit him now Riley. Now is your chance to get rid of him!
There is a big bang from the thunder, then I “ROAR!” and move my hand and hit his face, just like he had done to me. I make sure I hit him as hard as I can. Why is there blood? There was no blood when he hit me. That wasn’t even my hand; it looked like Lynoll’s paw. The bad man ran out the door screaming.
“You did it Lynoll. You helped me!”
No Child you did that all on your own.
“What do you mean Lynoll? You didn’t help me? I made him bleed?”
Go look in the mirror child, and see for yourself.
ga1984: I really enjoyed it! Characters were deep and plot was pretty complex. A bit on the violent side but it doesnt detract from the story. Very dark but situations make sense. Ends kinda abruptly and later chapters will need some editing work. I'm assuming there's more in the works?
Lauren Suzmeyan-Raine: I'm so glad you found a place to post your stories. I was horrified when I saw yours had been taken down, they are definitely the best 'reading' stories I've ever read. And I've made it my business to read every one I can. Well done.Lauren
Deleted User: This is a very clever story in the style of 19th century (and turn of the century) Gothic writing, very reminiscent of Stevenson's The Body Snatchers or even of Dr. Jekyll and Mr. Hyde (less so of Frankenstein itself, since the author is more minimalist than Shelley's florid, Romantic rhetoric). ...
Ben Gauger: Kudos to Bryan Laesch, author of Remnants of Chaos:Chaotic Omens for his use of the Gothic style of writing and in addition the footnotes and endnotes at the end of each chapter, a welcome accompaniment to be sure, though his use of grammar could use a little improving, but his use of punctuation...
Elizabeth Robbins: 4.5 starsAs far as apocalypse stories go, this one took a new direction. I'm glad someone finally addressed the need for a vampire apocalypse! This is sort of a multi-genre festival of delights. With hints of forced societies, vamps, hunters, romance, apocalypse, government conspiracy, and thrill...
FateFellShort: I have read this story and have followed the writers on tumblr from the beginning. Its a wonderful story. Beautifully written with a really nice pace, that makes it enjoyable to read more than once. For me, fairy tail has very good characters but what the writers have done is give them more depth...
Hudson: Your story was fantastic Erin! The Rising Sun was one of the first stories I read on Inkitt, and I have to say I don't regret the three to four days I spent pouring through the story.Probably the biggest strength I see in your writing is your characterisation of Eliana, Oriens, and the rest of th...
summerstone: Seriously this is one of the best books I've ever read. The plot is intriguing, I love the narrative style. Its very descriptive and unique, with minimal cliches. It makes for a great read and the sequels are amazing. Totally worth reading. ^^ That's me trying to be professional. But in all hones...
Steve Lang: I thought this story was imaginative, and well thought out. I also think it was an original piece, and not a rehash of previous scifi stories I've read in the past.Thank you for the effort put into this tale, and I look forward to reading more of your work!
Nate_L: This story is amazing. The style, the description, it all drags you in. The characters are mostly the well known characters from King Arthur. There's Merlin, the sword: Excalibur. I recommend reading this through, at least a little, as it's a very satisfying read. I added it to my reading list af...
FreakyPoet: "you made me laugh, made me cry, both are hard to do. I spent most of the night reading your story, captivated. This is why you get full stars from me. Thanks for the great story!"
Sara Joy Bailey: "Full of depth and life. The plot was thrilling. The author's style flows naturally and the reader can easily slip into the pages of the story. Very well done."