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The Night Keeper met Creeper

By RealJillyG All Rights Reserved ©

Thriller / Horror

Chapter One

Halloween night, Keeper is padding around in his quarters. restless with a sinister look on his face and mad thought running through his mind.

"I need to get out of here, why do they insist on keeping me in this confine ?"

He lays down back on his bed , both arms behind his head, staring at the ceiling, watching flickers of dust dance around the room.  Suddenly, he jumps up.

"That's it, I'm going out"

Had he known what was to come, he would have chosen to throw a film into the DVD player and roughed it out in the quiet confine of his cozy quarters.

"Winifred fetch my keys would you?"

No reply

"That's odd, she always answers in a jiffy when called upon"

Hearing no response he trots down the staircase.  "There's no lights on, where is everyone?"  Assuming they managed to be invited out for the evening he grabs his keys and steps out into the car park.   "Only one vehicle left for me to drive, I guess it's going to be the Volvo."

The roads are dark, foggy and winding not quite what I planned for but what the hell, something is waiting for me this night I know it, waiting for me in the darkness.  These hillsides are steep but I have driven them a thousand times at night before.   The fog however is a new twist, it is thick and leaving a heavy mist on the windshield, he says to himself.

On the way he picks up his girlfriend, Janelle, and they're headed off to a party about 20 miles away.  She's looking rather hot tonight, dressed like Elvira, mistress of the Dark.  Her ample bosom is busting forth like it has been inside a confine for far to long.  "She must have squeezed those things in there with duct tape and twine.  That outfit is glued to her like it's her own skin.  Not really much to my forte but I know my ego will be fed in large sums when the rest of the men at the party are looking at her like a piece of steak, while I know she's coming home with me."

The Party was the usual, a bunch of socialites getting drunk and the women insulting each other and the men trying to prove who's top dog.  After 4 hours Keeper had just about enough and decided that he and Janelle should make their exit.

As they drove down the road there was a massive amount of tension for some reason.  Suddenly a flash of a dark figure appears on the middle of the road and there is a loud screeching of the tires and he loses control of the car, there's a massive crash through a brick wall , down head over teakettle, Janelle is thrown from the car and Keepers face smashes through the windshield.  Then darkness...

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