Get Free Copy

100 free copies left

This novel is limited to 100 free copies due to its part in Inkitt’s Novel Contest.

Free copy left
You can read our best books
FeastfulSaint would love your feedback! Got a few minutes to write a review?
Write a Review

Field Trip

By FeastfulSaint All Rights Reserved ©

Thriller / Horror


   “Carol!!” She yells, tears flowing down her face. Carol’s face is filled with panic, her eyes are wide and she's clearly out of breath. “Diane!!” Carol desperately screams “HELP ME!!” Diane can see him behind her. His eyes soulless, pitch black eyes. Click-clack! Click-clack! His expression is calm, collective and unfazed by the flakes of dried blood falling off his cheeks as he reached out and grabbed Carol’s arm “Here!” Diane sees him raise a bloody fire axe with his other hand “Take my hand!” As soon as their hands lock, the floor suddenly collapses, a steel pipe launched out, hitting Diane on the head, knocking her unconscious.

    The water hitting the small puddles all around her created a nice rhythmic sound that is almost soothing, like small rain drops within a hollow cave. She could feel her eyes trying to force themselves open, but she felt so relax, at peace with herself. Click-clack! Click- clack! that sound sent a jolt of adrenaline within her system forcing her to spin around, pushing off debris of wood and sheet metal off of her back. She studies the area, But all she could see is the mangled metal and pipes dripping water beside her. It’s dark; with a single ray of light several feet ahead of her. The panting she’s letting out is creating a large echo and the pain within her is making it worse. “Where am I?” she thought, rubbing her head. the right side of her body is extremely sore and almost numb.

  She winched as she slowly stood up and suddenly, the image of her friend reaching out to her appeared in her head. “Carol!” she began to look around erratically, tripping over broken sheet rock and small air ducts.  “Carol, Where are you!?” From a distance, just underneath the ray of light, she could see Carol’s hand limp on the ground. Her silver ‘class of 13’ engrave bracelet glistening from the light overhead, giving the appearance of a small hidden treasure “C… Carol…” Diane reached out and touched Carol’s hand; her fingers felt cold, clammy “Carol, are you…” She began to scream as she realized she's holding Carol’s severed arm.  She toss the arm behind her and looks around. It's just stone debris, twisted metal and overturned furniture everywhere. Her breathing echoes heavily through the hollow halls. 

  She then heard that teeth chatter, click-clack, click-clack, click-clack. Her eyes widen, she could feel her heart racing and body tremble. Click-clack, click-clack, click-clack. Diane jumped up and began to bang on the metallic wall. “Marcus! Ms. Cruz! Paulie! Anyone! Anyone!!” A loud snap echoes around her and the floor begins t vibrate. “Oh no, not again!” Suddenly the floor collapsed, she screams, but this time she only dropped a few feet. She quickly fell on her knees and braced herself for any falling debris. She then hears a small ping in front of her, she slowly opened her eyes and sees Carol’s bracelet. She reached out; she could hear Carol’s faint laughter in her mind as she picks up the bracelet and holds it close to her bosom. Her body began to shake once again as she rest her back against the steel wall. “Someone, please save me…”


Continue Reading Next Chapter
Further Recommendations

Resting-Madness: I've been in love that strongly, that I could see myself in the same situation as Surgio. The slow crawl of desperation was well depicted, I could feel myself leaning close to the screen, like he and I were conspiring together on how to construct this Frankenstein of Adela. And that's written thr...

Caitlin E. Jones: Such a riveting short story, full to the brim with folklore and horrors! The rich details used to make up Doolin were as well-placed as they were written, right down to the disturbing presence of magical creatures. The lives of the humans are used to great effect, giving us short glimpses of thei...

Kastril Nomenclature: This is a very clever story in the style of 19th century (and turn of the century) Gothic writing, very reminiscent of Stevenson's The Body Snatchers or even of Dr. Jekyll and Mr. Hyde (less so of Frankenstein itself, since the author is more minimalist than Shelley's florid, Romantic rhetoric). ...

AJDay: Hello JaimePAvane,So, this is my first review on this site, and I am glad I found your story. I like where you are going with it and I am curious to see what future chapters look like. Firstly, your narrator; I love that she is describing not just her life but the world around her. Obviously a wo...

pikagirl311: Katie Masters has definite skill when it comes to plot work and characters. The story is well-paced and pulls you along with the tide, keeping you hooked until the very end. The only reason I did not give it five stars across the board is due to a few minor quibbles with misspellings and such lik...

Alex Rushmer: I like the intrigue that you introduce from the very beginning of the story. The idea of the girl waking up in the alley with no memory of how she got there and with injuries is very interesting. It was very well done. There were a lot of grammatical errors that need to be fixed though. I think t...

Alex Reltin: This is a great story! I love how well you go into detail and emotions of Capri, and Mel. You have amazing dialogue and overall it's just a thrill to read!The only critique I could find is that some of the paragraphs should be separated. For example:-"If Nia would have just let me take the car an...

Deleted User: You put a lot of effort into this story, and in some places the detail is lovely. The beginning is really good. There is a lot of good detail in the first paragraphs. I get a good feel for his confusion.But I am lost in the back story. I have no idea where this is going. Perhaps mention someone y...

Girl on Fire: Great story, line Alex!!!It really has a edge on it. It put me on edge with its thrill. Can't wait to read the rest.!!!

This story wasn't for you ?
Look at our most viral stories!

FreakyPoet: "you made me laugh, made me cry, both are hard to do. I spent most of the night reading your story, captivated. This is why you get full stars from me. Thanks for the great story!"

The Cyneweard

Sara Joy Bailey: "Full of depth and life. The plot was thrilling. The author's style flows naturally and the reader can easily slip into the pages of the story. Very well done."

This story wasn't for you ?
Look at our most viral story!

Ro-Ange Olson: "Loved it and couldn't put it down. I really hope there is a sequel. Well written and the plot really moves forward."