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The Demon in the Woods

By Lilybug93 All Rights Reserved ©

Thriller / Horror

When it all began

Way back a long time ago way before the white settlers settled in America. There was two Tribes the Kanori and the Niqueoas. The Kanori were led by Etu a fairly old man which was in his 40's and Hakan the chief of the Niqueoas which was a young and arrogant man in his early 20's. Etu the chief of the Kanori  had grown tired of the war between both of the tribes, so he offered his only daughter Catori to marry Hakan in hope of making peace between the two tribes and uniting them.  For the war between the tribes had crippled them very badly. Thus requiring them to form an alliance, 2 days had pasted and Hakan had agreed to the arrangement. 

Unfortunately the marriage did not result in peace and unity. Hakan had slaughtered almost all of the Kanori expect for the women including Catori and the shaman, which left the grieving Catori outraged. So one night she silently crept out of her husband’s tent and sneaked her way out of the village, went through the moonlit meadow and into the forest  and down a  dark narrow path to the shaman’s tent. She cautiously approached the tent, which had an ominous aura to it and various bones scattered around it. She called out to see if anyone was there, silence. So she called out again even louder “Yes! What is it?” an old cracked voice was heard, and then mumbling was heard. An old man around 70 opened the flap to his tent, his lightening blue eyes regarding her coldly. “H-h-h-ell-o m-my n-n-name is C-cat-ori. Then his eyes widen in shock and then soften.

“I apologize Catori I did not mean to be so rude I did not know it was you. How my I help you?” said the Shaman. 

"I would like you to put a curse on Hakan for slaughtering my family.” Catori said with a determined look on her face. 

"I am sorry Catori, but I would not advice such an action.” said the Shaman. 

“Please, please I beg of you help me avenge my family.” She pleaded. The shaman sighed quietly and said 

“Very well I will help you avenge your family, but I will require a few things to do this.” “What do you need?” Catori asked eagerly clasping her hands together.  I will need some of your blood, a strand of Hakan’s hair, and something you hold dear.” The shaman said sadly lowering his head looking away from her. “Consider it done.” Catori said as she left the tent and went back to the village. The shaman watched her go down the path to the village “Foolish girl, Etu please talk to your daughter.” The shaman said looking up at the stars. While Catori slept she had the most delightful dream that she was walking through the meadow on a warm and bright summer day, and then saw her father standing there in the middle of the meadow with his back to her. “Father!” she cried running toward him.  Oh father! how I have missed you father, I thought you were dead.” Said Catori “I am” Etu replied turning around to her. She froze looking into his white glowing eyes as the atmosphere grew cold “F-f-father?” ”Do not be afraid I will not harm you.” Etu said “I am going to avenge your death father and my brothers.” She said now feeling braver than she did before. “No, young one, only bad will come from it.” Etu said scolding her.  “But father he needs to be punished, he betrayed us all, and now you’re dead!” She said outraged.  That made Etu frown, “Goodbye daughter.” I will see you again one day hopefully not soon though." Etu said then his eyes started to shine as bright as the sun and  suddenly he looked up to the sun, and faded away into the air turning into sunbeams then Catori woke up.

  Then she waited for Hakan to wake. Once Hakan had woke up she seduced him into lying with her, where she took the opportunity to take some of Hakan’s hair.  After that she spent the rest of the day doing what she would normally do like washing clothes, gathering food, and cooking, etc.  But as the sun crept down the sky and everyone fell asleep. Catori began to prepare to leave the village, packing a bow, some arrows, a knife, her father’s deer totem ,Hakan’s hair ,furs ,water ,herbs, meat, some corn, among some other things into her bison skin bag.  Then Catori quickly sneaked out of the village to the shamans tent. 

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