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Blue eyes, Charming smile

By melichan223 All Rights Reserved ©

Horror

Blue eyes, Charming smile

Something isn't right; the child could feel it as she sat on her swing. What’s wrong? Something is off. Gripping the chains of the swing harder, she slipped off of the seat her bare feet touching the grassy ground below her. Mommy’s gone…. Where did she go? Looking around with a sort of fear in her eyes, she stepped forward and out from under the tree from which the swing was located. The people around her ignored her as she continued to walk forward, looking around for the familiar face that she knew so well. Walking for hours, she whimpered as everyone started to leave unable to find the person she called mommy. Mommy? Where are you?! Calling out, no one looked down at her. Almost as if no one herd her. Accept for one, with a crazed smile and a sick mind one that only thought bad things to do towards little girls such as her. Looking up when she felt a hand on her shoulder, she looked up at the blue eyed man who had a charming smile. Smiling as he spoke he held out his hand, and she happily took it. He didn't seem dangerous, he looked nice… What she didn't realize was that this would be the last time she ever see the light of the sun.

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