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It's a Girls Night Out

By RealJillyG All Rights Reserved ©

Thriller / Horror

It’s a Girls Night Out – Short Story

 Yeah, out with the girls for our usual girls night.

You know how it is , drinking, acting silly, checking out the eye candy for the evening and giggling up a storm.  We decide it is way to hot inside the club and head outside for a smoke and we happen to take notice of our sister Carmen was glaring at something across the street in the pitch dark.  She got this expression on her face that is really actually quite difficult to describe.  ( You know how Cujo looked at the woman right before he sprang at her?) She is almost Awestruck, dazed and confused.  I’m looking down the alleyway to see just what it is she so mesmerized with.  All I am able to make out is a tall shadow… hmm has the Slenderman finally come for us?

 OMG!!  I reel backwards tripping over my own heels and land flat on my ass. Rachelle reaches for me and yells I’m getting us the fuck outta here! Carmen reaches out and grabs Rachelle’s arm stopping our fleeing moment dead in its tracks, NO WAIT!!, what the fuck is deal with you chicks?! I want to know who the fuck that is, she says.  I noticed him a short while ago, he’s been lurking and I am kinda wanting to get closer cause I think he’s wearing a mask and its got this glistening to it that I want to touch it.  By the time she wheels us around he’s gone.

 Well that’s just great! she yells.  Might I point out to you, my sisters, that not everything is about you every time we go out!  Hey listen sister mine, We’re up for fun and adventure just as much as the next girl but fuck, what the hell?  Every time we are out with you, you managed to get us into something that either has us posting bail or flashing our boobs at some officer just so we can get back home in one piece without having to pay enormous amounts in fines!!!  

Lest we remind you what happened in August Miss ooh officer I swear I only had one.  Yeah that’s right when you took us from being drunk in a bar to being drunk in public and decided you would take us for a joyride in the cop car.  Rachelle and I want to go frigging shoe shopping tomorrow.  I need a new pair of boots.  Do you have any idea what a good pair costs these days?! Damn! Just as we turn back.

 BAM!!!   There he is.

 Holy Fuck! We scream at the same time.   Carmen is just standing there looking at us like “what?” Oh dear god, he’s a tall mean looking Mo-Fo, but hey at least he dresses well I thought for a sec.  Oh my god; his face!, What is that? It was glistening all right,  Perhaps even dripping.  It looked like someone had peeled back layers and just left it like that.  Rachelle grabs Carmen’s arm and tugs,  Carmen rips her arm away and steps toward the bloody-faced tall dark stranger.  I grab Rachelle and Tracy and pull them away out of his arms reach. Carmen!, I scream, He’s holding an ax, get the hell back!! No, no she says, it’s okay, I ….. I just want to touch it.  She reaches out towards his face.   He raises his bloodied arm in the air and is ready to swing full-bore down at her………..

The last thing I remember hearing is “YOU’RE ALL GOING TO DIE TONIGHT"

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