RealJillyG would love your feedback! Got a few minutes to write a review?
Write a Review

It's a Girls Night Out

By RealJillyG All Rights Reserved ©

Thriller / Horror

It’s a Girls Night Out – Short Story

Yeah, out with the girls for our usual girls night.

You know how it is , drinking, acting silly, checking out the eye candy for the evening and giggling up a storm. We decide it is way to hot inside the club and head outside for a smoke and we happen to take notice of our sister Carmen was glaring at something across the street in the pitch dark. She got this expression on her face that is really actually quite difficult to describe. ( You know how Cujo looked at the woman right before he sprang at her?) She is almost Awestruck, dazed and confused. I’m looking down the alleyway to see just what it is she so mesmerized with. All I am able to make out is a tall shadow… hmm has the Slenderman finally come for us?

OMG!! I reel backwards tripping over my own heels and land flat on my ass. Rachelle reaches for me and yells I’m getting us the fuck outta here! Carmen reaches out and grabs Rachelle’s arm stopping our fleeing moment dead in its tracks, NO WAIT!!, what the fuck is deal with you chicks?! I want to know who the fuck that is, she says. I noticed him a short while ago, he’s been lurking and I am kinda wanting to get closer cause I think he’s wearing a mask and its got this glistening to it that I want to touch it. By the time she wheels us around he’s gone.

Well that’s just great! she yells. Might I point out to you, my sisters, that not everything is about you every time we go out! Hey listen sister mine, We’re up for fun and adventure just as much as the next girl but fuck, what the hell? Every time we are out with you, you managed to get us into something that either has us posting bail or flashing our boobs at some officer just so we can get back home in one piece without having to pay enormous amounts in fines!!!

Lest we remind you what happened in August Miss ooh officer I swear I only had one. Yeah that’s right when you took us from being drunk in a bar to being drunk in public and decided you would take us for a joyride in the cop car. Rachelle and I want to go frigging shoe shopping tomorrow. I need a new pair of boots. Do you have any idea what a good pair costs these days?! Damn! Just as we turn back.

BAM!!! There he is.

Holy Fuck! We scream at the same time. Carmen is just standing there looking at us like “what?” Oh dear god, he’s a tall mean looking Mo-Fo, but hey at least he dresses well I thought for a sec. Oh my god; his face!, What is that? It was glistening all right, Perhaps even dripping. It looked like someone had peeled back layers and just left it like that. Rachelle grabs Carmen’s arm and tugs, Carmen rips her arm away and steps toward the bloody-faced tall dark stranger. I grab Rachelle and Tracy and pull them away out of his arms reach. Carmen!, I scream, He’s holding an ax, get the hell back!! No, no she says, it’s okay, I ….. I just want to touch it. She reaches out towards his face. He raises his bloodied arm in the air and is ready to swing full-bore down at her………..

The last thing I remember hearing is “YOU’RE ALL GOING TO DIE TONIGHT"

Write a Review Did you enjoy my story? Please let me know what you think by leaving a review! Thanks, RealJillyG
Continue Reading
Further Recommendations

Spring: I normally don't read fiction novels, but I absolutely enjoyed reading Silent Shadows! The style is quite different from the previous fiction novels I've attempted to read.Great job!

William Elliott Kern: Long story, the plot uncovered midway through the story. From beginning, the story was fast moving. Then dragged on for quite some time. The Author was good in describing her characters, their clothing, etc. but a lot of that disclosure distracted from the story moving fast.Not withstanding, the...

William Elliott Kern: Whew. one telling his story, in the Bar, to his friend, who questions some circumstances that need clarity, The Confusion comes from a man, carrying his dead friend Chappies, while conversing with himself, and Chappies, and his alter ego......a broken mind, not yet forgotten..........The Author ...

Nishant Jain: I felt as if i am watching a movie,not reading a book. The story was definitely interesting. It was more of action than horror for me. There are a few grammatical and spelling errors I came across and at times I found it difficult to imagine some things which the author is trying to convey, but o...

emmawioskowski: Amazing book! I can hardly put it down!! I hope it gets published. From a writers point of view the detail is great, and the writing style is awesome. I haven't finished yet, but when I do I bet the ending will be just as good

NRF: This was a very interesting story line, although the author did not go far enough in explaining the war and why some received special powers and some didn't. I really enjoyed this story and look forward to reading more of this author's writing.

Nishant Jain: Plus points-* the story is quite interesting* well detailed(u can easily imagine andpicture what the narrator is trying to say)* huge twist in the endImprovements-- i feel the story unfolds a bit slowlyIt is definitely worth a shot. I have no regrets reading BREAKING POINT.

More Recommendations

Kashaf Azmat: The concept is excellent everything is well defined that you can picture the whole scenario which makes you feel connected to the plot and this is the thing that catches my eye and this what i am looking for in every novel.Keep it up

debmart6901: I could not put this story down. I stayed up reading when I should have been in bed. could not get enough, could not wait to find how it ended. Great story telling. Great detail. Loved it. The characters were very vivid.

Jim E. Johnson: Rarely do I find a mystery that peeks my interest, but Jack Huber's Pat Ruger reminds me of Parker's Spenser or Spillane's Hammer! Strong character with the right connections and plot drivers to keep anyone engaged and never putting it down.The encounters of the characters Ruger engages, continue...

borkarprasad: Nicely laid story. Needed a little more ghost and Raven conversations. Initially, Had everyone on suspect list but satisfied by the precision to capture the killer. Waiting for more Raven and Cade adventures.

Steven Tesoro: The Symphony Of Life, as I read this I myself are homeless, not much of an income an occasionally, it crosses mostly everyones mind about doing the dirty. But it is worth the time to read this story and as I'm reading it thinking about getting my life back to where it should be, it's hard in thi...

Barbara Zavela: Do you know the song, 'Imagine' by John Lennon?If you had a chance for a world like the one described in that song, would you grab it with both hands or turn away and reject it.This story pulls you in from the beginning with well-written scenarios. The author offers you the opportunity to bring y...

{{ contest.story_page_sticky_bar_text }} Be the first to recommend this story.

About Us:

Inkitt is the world’s first reader-powered book publisher, offering an online community for talented authors and book lovers. Write captivating stories, read enchanting novels, and we’ll publish the books you love the most based on crowd wisdom.