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River Country

By SunOlive All Rights Reserved ©

Horror

Chapter 1


Ann : Hey, where did you run off to? I thought we had plans to go to the park today?

11:00 am


Eileen: Hey, I went to get breakfast!

11:01 am


Ann : Oh, and you didn’t invite me?

11:05 am


Eileen: I tried to wake you up!! But you wouldn't budge. Disney has some good food, I couldn't resist.

11:07 am



Ann : Shoot, I’m still on west coast time! I’m totally jet lagged now that we’re in Florida xD where should I meet you, are you still in the lobby?

11:08 am


Eileen: No, I'm walking around. I was giving you your beauty sleep!!

11:10 am


Ann : LOL, thanks. I will grab breakfast then. Where should I meet you?

11:15 am


Eileen : Idk, I heard some people talking about an abandoned part of the park. River something.. I think I'm going to sneak in and check it out.

11:20 am


Ann : What! Eileen no! It’s probably abandoned for a reason! Someone probably died there or something!!

11:25 am



Eileen : C'mon!!! It could be fun,I mean how often do we come here? It's not like we can do it everyday.

11:26 am

Ann : I don’t know…

11:27 am


Eileen : Ooh I think I see the entrance!

11:34 am


Ann : Nooo! Eileen don’t go! What if someone catches you? What part of the park is this even at? How far away are you???

11:45 am


Eileen : It's hard to describe! Just ask for directions and get your ass over here! It's seriously deserted, like they even left some items in the old souvenir shop!

11:46 am


Eileen : Want an old Mickey Mouse hat? Hahaha. Also, I'm about to send a pic. Check this out!

11:46 am


Eileen : Sent photo:


Eileen : This bridge is super rickety! Come on, it's surprisingly cool in this area, I mean, it's Florida. Shouldn't I be hot?

11: 47 am



Ann : Oh my gosh I can’t believe you went in!! Eileen!! I don’t want to have to come find you, cold or not.

11:51 am


Ann : Agh, I can’t believe I’m doing this!! You seriously suck ASS! This isn’t funny,you’re probably going to get hurt! I don’t want to end up in the hospital on this trip!!

11:53 am


Ann : Eileen? Are you there? Hello? Nothing happened right?

12:00 pm



Ann : Hello????????

12:03 pm



Eileen : I found an old building

12:05 pm


Eileen : It's kinda dark, it smells dusty.

12:06 pm


Ann : Don’t touch anything inside, there is probably disease on everything!

12:08 pm


Eileen : lol! I see something in the corner, it's really rusty. I'm going to check it out.

12:10 pm


Ann : Eileen! Don’t open it!! Omg this is like a horror movie! Don’t go, a dead body is gonna fall out or something!! Ugh, I’m coming as fast as I can, just try not to touch anything in that time! I’m being serious! You’re not funny!

12:12 pm


Eileen : Don't worry, and besides, I think this is hilarious. Think about how many people won't have this story to tell but WE do!! We will be so cool..c'mon ann

12: 15 pm


Ann : Yeah if one of us doesn’t DEI in a freak accidentm!

12: 16 pm


Ann : *DIE, !!

12: 16 pm


Eileen : It's hard to open this thing, I cut my finger on some rust!!!!

12: 20 pm


Ann : I told you not to touch anything!! Ugh! Now we are gonna have to take you to a doctor. Do you know what happens when you cut your finger on something rusty?? Will you just tsand still? Maybe...I don’t kow, exit the area?

12: 21 pm


Ann : *Stand, know

12: 21 pm


Eileen : No, I got it opened! There are some papers in here...let me read them

12: 22 pm


Ann : Oh my gosh. I’m at the entrance, how did you even get in? There’s a big green wall here...

12:25 pm


Eileen : You have to walk around a little bit, you should see a crack you can slip through

12:26 pm


Ann : Can’t you just, like, come out?

12:27 pm


Eileen : No! These papers say something about kids dying or something.

12: 30 pm


Eileen : will you stop crying? I can hear you all the way over here.

12:30 pm


Ann : bro, I may be worrying about you rn but I’m not crying.... I think you ought to think about leaving now...Like...seriously.

12:30 pm


Eileen : It's okay to admit you're crying, just cut it out it's hard to concentrate.

12: 31 pm


Ann : Hey, we are best friends. Don’t you think I would have told you if I was in tears by now?

12:32 pm


Eileen : Yes, but we always play jokes on each other. I didn't know you could mimic a kid so easily. And just after I told you what I read.

12: 32 pm

Ann : Do I sound like I’m in the mood to joke right now? Get out of there if you hear someone!! Oh my gosh! I’m getting an authority!

12:33 pm


Eileen : You're gonna knark on me?!

12:34 pm


Ann : Of course I am! You’re scaring me and I want you out of there! I’m not inside yet!

12:34 pm


Eileen : oh my god. There's someone here. Like, I heard something

12:36 pm


Eileen : The crying is getting closer. Are you sure it isn't you? C'mon this is a joke. You're trying to get me back.

12:36 pm


Ann : Oh my god!! Eileen! I’m not! You HAVE to leave!! Run!! get out of there!

12:37 pm


Eileen : it's probably security. You did knark!!! You're never going to hear the end of this, I’ll have you know.

12:39 pm


Ann : I haven’t even mustered up the courage to move away from the green wall yet. I was hoping you would come to your senses and come out. Please do that before I really do start to cry.

12: 40 pm


Eileen : Who is it then? Did security follow me in? At least the crying stopped.

12:41 pm


Ann : Eileen.... please leave… please…

12:42 pm


Ann : Hello?? Eileen please reply...did something happen?

12:48 pm


Eileen : Hold on! :/ There is still more I want to see. I’ll leave as soon as possible though. Damn, these papers were getting interesting. Should I bring them?

12: 49 pm


Ann : No, please just leave them and come back. Maybe I’m silly for worrying and we’ll look back on this later and laugh but right now I just want you back safe.

12:50 pm


Ann : I will wait outside for you.

12:51 pm


Eileen : I just put them in my pocket, they might be hiding something here. This could be worth something!

12:53 pm


Ann : Ok, please come out now. You’re stalling and people are giving me looks because I have tears running down my face. Please tell me I’m just being silly...

12:54 pm

Ann : Come on, Eileen this was supposed to be a fun trip. You’re really freaking me out. Why haven’t you come out yet?

1:05 pm


Eileen : hehe..I'm kinda lost

1:08 pm


Ann : What?! I’m coming in to find you!!! Follow my voice when I yell for you.

1:10pm


Eileen : Okay, I'm gonna be on...barrel bridge?

1:11pm


Ann : Ok, I see that on the directory.

1:15 pm


Ann : Do you hear me yelling? I’m coming toward you...I haven’t heard you call back.

1:25 pm



Eileen : I don't hear you! I see something floating in the water. A little tennis shoe?

1:26 pm


Ann : Ugh, thats creepy. Don’t touch it, just listen for my voice.

1:26pm


Eileen : I'm leaning over the edge to get a closer look.

1:27 pm


Ann : Didn’t you say that bridge was rickety?! Don’t do it!!

1:27 pm


Ann : Eileen, I just heard a shriek!! Don’t tell me that was you!?

1:28 pm


Ann : Eileen, fuck, this isn’t funny!

1:35 pm


Ann : Fuck fuck fuck fuck I’m crying please answer me!!

1:45 pm


Ann : Do you hear me calling for you! I’m screaming now!! Eileen please! Call back or text me please!!

1:46 pm


Ann called Eileen 5x


Eileen : Will you forget me like they did?

1:51 pm


Ann : what? Eileen, what are you saying. You’re not funny. This isn’t funny. Just come meet me.

1:52 pm



Eileen : I just wanted to have fun. How was I supposed to know it was dangerous?

1:53 pm


Ann : Is that you crying? Where are you? I will come get you and we will leave… Please… You’re my best friend

1:53 pm

Eileen : I can't leave now, I'm sorry.

1:55 pm


Ann : Why not?! This is scary!! Let’s go!! I’m finding you and dragging you out!!

1:55 pm


Ann : Where did you go!? Why is this whole area like a maze?!

1:56 pm


Ann : I can’t find you!! I’m by the building that has the rusty file cabinet. I can’t stop crying. Please just come out so I can hug you and we can go back.

2:00 pm


Ann : You’re really freaking me out. Please answer. I feel like I can’t breath.

2:10 pm


Ann : Why do I see your hair bow in the water?

2:15 pm


Ann : Was that you that just called my name?

2:21 pm


Ann : I’m coming! I knew I would find you! I’m so relieved.

2:22 pm



The police were contacted about two girls witnessed to having gone into the now abandoned “River Country” at Disney World Orlando, Florida. The police investigated, and much to their confusion, they found no evidence of the two girls. While people at the hotel they were rumored to stay at remember them by their description, there is no record on file of them ever rooming there.

Several months have gone by, still no trace of these two girls. The only possible link could be a hair bow found in the water, but it's not for certain it even belonged to the girls.

Rumor has it, if you linger near the entrance to the abandoned park, you can feel an eerie presence, and even catch a glance of what appears to be two or more water-logged figures. There have been no updates in the case as of yet.

By: Kimberly Page and Vanessa Bahna



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