The Intrusive Girl

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However, the figure is unfazed and simply comes closer to me so I can smell it’s rotting breath. It’s blood-red eyes stare down on me and it whispers in a hoarse voice, “ Goodbye.” Gasping in shock, I stumble backwards into the open hallway and fall onto the floor. I can’t comprehend the gruesome situation that had just unravelled before me, but I knew that I had to leave the house as soon as possible. Trembling with fear, I rise and sprint down the stairs to the front entrance. Just before I grasp the brass doorknob, I am slammed into a nearby wall by an unknown force. The old, wood wall heaves from my weight, and it causes cracks to adorn the wood. I turn around slowly and come face to face with the cruel figure I had seen upstairs. The mysterious figure steps forward with a sick smile on its face. It flicks his hand and I am chained to the wall by invisible ropes. Struggling to get free, I release a piercing scream that shakes the building. Lillian Harris craves danger like a drug, but one day will she go too far? After mourning the death of her boyfriend, Lillian is ready, no more than ready, to plan her next adventure. One so big, so crazy, that it will take her mind off him, but has she bitten off more than she can chew? Joined by her friend Marie, she sets off into a crazy journey with many twists and turns.

Horror / Thriller
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Chapter 1

The school’s front courtyard is bustling with high-school children, and I watch them intently from where I am sitting. My friend Marie and I are sitting at our usual place: the hidden, grassy area in front of the school parking lot. Almost no one knows about this private place, so Marie and I can usually relax in peace without a hoard of gossiping girls screaming in our ears. Right now, Marie is finishing some Pre-calculus homework on a nearby bench, while I am lounging on a branch of a large, oak tree. I’ve always loved climbing trees since I was really young because being so high up makes me feel free. I close my eyes as the wind softly whistles in my ear, and the lull of sleep slowly begins to overcome me. Marie’s voice snaps me out of my tired state.

“ Come on, Lillian!” Marie drones as she packs away her calculus homework into her backpack, “ The bell is about to ring.”

“ Chill Marie, we still have a couple of minutes until school starts,” I reply back to her, rubbing my eyes with heels of palms. I had barely gotten any sleep last night because of the exciting idea I came up with. I jump off the tree and sit next to Marie on the bench. “Hey, so my mom is going out of town for a couple of days, and I was thinking about something fun we could do together.”

“Sure why not, my schedule’s free,” Marie replies back to me.

“Okay! So, I was thinking that we could finally go to that haunted house on Skidmore street. Ever since Aiden, my mom has been super over protective of me. She won’t let me go anywhere without adult supervision,” I roll my eyes super aggravated about my mom. Marie gasps at the mention of Aiden.

“You know why you can’t go to Skidmore street! It’s too dangerous and super creepy. I actually agree with your mom. There is no way that I am going to that haunted house. Haven’t you learned anything from Aiden!” Marie states firmly. I slightly choke up about the mention of Aiden. Aiden was my best friend for 9 years and my boyfriend for 2 of those years. He was the first person to understand me. We both loved adventure and craved the adrenaline rush from dangerous stunts. For our 2 year anniversary, we went cliff diving and it was the best experience of my life. We wanted to check out the haunted house on Skidmore Street as our next big thrill, but my mom grounded from going. However I didn’t want to ruin Aiden’s fun, so I let him go without me. The entire time, I was in my room and Aiden was facetiming me in the haunted house. It was fun for about an hour until things got drastically worse. I remember that day clearly.

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