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Killer Night

By Ginger_Queen_94 All Rights Reserved ©


Chapter 1

Bethany and Raven went over to Holly’s house to swim on day. They didn’t want to get burned, so they figured to swim at night. Bethany and Holly had done it many times, so they knew it was safe. When night came, the girl got into their swimsuits and grabbed their towels. They walked outside and Holly noticed the full moon. She loved looking at the clouds, stars and the moon. They mystified her, like they called her name. These things were her favorite things to take pictures of. When she saw the moon, she was a little scared. The moon was bright red. She had never seen such a thing before. “Bethany. Raven. Look at the moon.” Holly told the girls. The girls looked up and saw the bright red moon. It was if someone splattered blood on it.

“That is cool. Are okay to go swimming or do you want to take some photos of it?” Bethany asked Holly.

“No, I’ll take some later.” Holly replied. They all set down their towels on the grill and started running to the pool. When Holly started to get in, she was bracing herself for the cold ice water, but when she stuck her foot into the water, it was warm and nice, like a bath. She jumped in and told the girls it was warm. The other girls jumped in and all was fun. They played Marco polo, water volleyball, and other fun water games. After an hour of swimming, all the games were played and the girls sat on raffs and talked.

“Do you think I should go out with Jack?” Holly asked her friends. Jack was a guy at her school. He was a total sweetheart but got clingy. Bethany and Raven have had much more experience in the dating department, so Holly always went to them for advice. The two girls came to Holly when they needed help with school or to find a great book to read.

“Yes. I know he likes you and anyone is better than going out with James.” Raven told Holly. James was Holly’s last boyfriend and he didn’t care about Holly. He would always ditch her and never talked to her.

 “Jack is a great guy, so you should go out with him.” Bethany said. She was never the one to make rude comments about people, even if they weren’t in the room.

 They floated some more and talked about boys, new TV shows that were coming on, and books. After two hours of being the pool they were ready to get out. Bethany was about to step on the latter and get out, when Raven screamed. Bethany and Holly went to her and asked why she had screamed. “T-there was a p-person.” Raven stammered to the girls.

 “Where was the person?” Holly asked.

 Raven pointed to the drive way. “T-they were l-laying on the g-ground and staring at us.” She explained.

 Holly and Bethany looked where she pointed and saw a person running away. The person looked like it was a holding an ax. Bethany and Holly were getting scared. “Raven, you better not be joking.” Bethany told Raven.

 “You saw the person. Who could I be joking?” Raven asked.

 “You could have set this up before you came here.” Holly said.

 “No, I did not set this up.” Raven said. Bethany and Holly looked at each other. “I swear on my new favorite boots.” Raven continued. Holly and Bethany knew she loved those boots like her own child, so they believed her. “It could have been Josh, Holly’s step-brother. You know how he always likes to pick on us.”

 “But why would he be carrying an ax?” Holly asked. She knew he didn’t like her, only because she wouldn’t do anything with him, but was he crazy enough to kill her?

 “Maybe because he is crazy!” Bethany softy yelled.

 “He may be crazy but he isn’t crazy enough to kill.” Holly reassured her friends and herself. “Let’s get out of the pool and go watch Harry Potter again.” They agreed.

 They decided to run up to the house and get inside to safety. Bethany got out first and ran to her towel. When she made it up there she wrapped the towel around her and when to turn on a light. After Bethany came back out, Holly got out and walked to her towel. Then Raven got out and ran to the towels.

 “Why did you run?” Holly asked her.

 “That guy could still be out there.” Raven told her.

 “Raven, I think we are safe.” Bethany told her.

 “You never know. It could be Josh and he is waiting for us to come inside to kill us.” Raven said.

 “You read too many horror novels.” Holly told Raven. What they didn’t say out loud is that all of them were scared. They didn’t know what would happen, or what Josh would do. They all wrapped their towels around them and when inside. Holly went down stairs to her room, and Bethany and Raven went to the guest room upstairs. Holly got dressed and went upstairs to get the movie ready. She popped three kinds of popcorn for her and her friends. Bethany liked extra butter, Raven liked cameral, and she liked kettle. While the popcorn was popping, she got the movie ready. They were going to be watching a Harry Potter movie marathon. So she put the first movie into the DVD player. She got the entire popcorn ready, along with pop. Pepsi for Bethany, water for Raven and mountain dew for herself. She sat on the couch wondering where her friends were, so she started to go upstairs to look for her friends. “Bethany! Raven!” Holly called up the stairs. She didn’t hear anything, so continued to walk up the stairs. She tried again, “Bethany! Raven!” She didn’t want to wake up her parents or Josh so she went to the guest room and opened the door slowly. She sunk to the ground, Bethany and Raven were on the bed with bloody, rusty knifes in them. She covered her mouth so she wouldn’t scream, but she knew she would have to go tell her parents. She slowly walked to the next room over, she didn’t know if the killer was still in the house or not. She knocked on the door, and waited. After a minute, she knocked again. No answer. She had a bad feeling in her stomach. She opened this door and she saw a strange person killing her mom, they had already killed her dad. She screamed and the killer noticed her. She ran out of the room and ran down the stairs as fast as she could. She ran down to the basement to get Josh. When she got to his room, she noticed he wasn’t there.

 “Gotcha sister.” The killer said in her ear.

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