Nada Adel Sobhi would love your feedback! Got a few minutes to write a review?
Write a Review


By Nada Adel Sobhi All Rights Reserved ©

Fantasy / Horror


A screech shattered the calmness surrounding me. My hands jumped to block my ears as I dropped to my knees, praying for it to stop.

It got louder and louder, my eyes tightly shut; I could almost see my mind exploding in front of me. Strange shapes appeared in my vision yet I couldn't tell what they were.

Another earth-shattering screech.

I could feel my ear drums about to burst and blood on the verge of seeping out. My teeth clattered to breaking point, making my whole body tremble.

Then silence.

I didn't know if I had gone deaf or if whatever it was was finally over.

I managed to unglue my eyes open. Tears had fallen involuntarily.

Darkness. A pure blackness engulfed my world like I had never thought possible.

I still clung to my ears. The sound of the music in horror movies always scared me more than the actual scene. It played my nerves, ripping them to shreds. So, I kept them covered and closed, as hard as I could.

I removed my hands for a fraction of a second as fear gripped me.

Then, a tinge of white appeared in the distance. So small, yet so bright against the black background.

It grew bigger. And bigger.

I closed my eyes and prayed. I felt the light growing, becoming strong, making my closed eyes see grey instead of black.

Then, movement.

I bent my head to the ground. Grass?

I didn’t want to remove my hands from ears, so I shook my forehead against the floor. It was earth.

Slowly, raising my head, and wishing I had at least four arms to cover my eyes and ears at the same time, I slowly opened my eyes to find a forest. Trees, grass, rocks.

But how?

I looked at my clothing, I was still in my pyjamas. Blue, white and pink and out of place.

Movement again. I looked up and saw a clearing up ahead, with a cloaked figure kneeling on the ground, surrounded by skulls perched on spear tips.

I removed my hands from my ears.

Quiet. Like the forest was holding its breath.

I hugged myself, trying to bringing some warmth or calm to my frigidly-rigid body.

I approached, but never passed the kneeling figure. I opened my mouth but no words came out. I wanted to ask where I was, but was afraid that interrupting this person would get me killed.

Was I even alive at this point?

“Took you too long, little one. Thought you had more mettle,” croaked an elderly woman’s voice.

My breath caught in my chest.

“Wh-who are you? An-And what am-am I doing here?”

She rose. A face trodden and weathered surveyed me as I clung to my body.

“Not bad. Not bad,” she went on, her voice cracking in amusement, as she held my face and looked me over. “You’ll make a fine sacrifice for him.”

“Who-who’s him?” My heart skipped several beats.

“My lord. Ares!” She rasped, lifting her hands gloriously to the sky above as I felt my soul die in fear.

Write a Review Did you enjoy my story? Please let me know what you think by leaving a review! Thanks, Nada Adel Sobhi
Continue Reading
Further Recommendations

Drew C. Elyon: I've only read one chapter so far, but from what I've seen, this is steampunk at its best. The narrative flows so beautifully I could envision every scene in an almost cinematic fashion. I believe in the complexity of simplicity, and this story has that in its descriptions.

Cliuin: I couldn't stop reading from the moment that I started this book and that was some hours ago...

Dr.Strangelove: not the ending I expected.

SeanSavage: Good plot that moves fairly quickly. Time passage somewhat vague. but not indecipherable. Very good syntax, grammar and punctuation. The story flowed very well, however, the breaks between chapters and the time jumps tended to be slightly confusing at first. I could see where the author was going...

Aditya Harikrish: It had me on tenterhooks since the very first page. Excllently developed plot and characters. You've done an amazing job of building a fantasy world from scratch. Hats off to you!A sequel is a must.

KerryMI: One would think the idea of vampire loving man has been over flogged, yet this story's fresh perspective on Vampires, how they live and how they connect with humans is so effortlessly narrated that it almost becomes truth. Your writing was fast enough to keep me greedily turning each page but slo...

More Recommendations

William Elliott Kern: Long story, the plot uncovered midway through the story. From beginning, the story was fast moving. Then dragged on for quite some time. The Author was good in describing her characters, their clothing, etc. but a lot of that disclosure distracted from the story moving fast.Not withstanding, the...

William Elliott Kern: A young boy," later found on the highway by General Jarda", was murdered by Barbarians, came back to life as he was an Anmah, age 6 when the loss of his family had occured.........General Jarda, took the boy, gave him a new name, and introduced him to another Anham and the King, This Story is w...

Deleted User: I love your use of writer's craft and how you use figurative language to enhance your writing. It great how you didn't have any spelling or grammar issues.

Kevin Brand: My overall rating: 4.8/5 starsLoved. Every. Second. Everytime I came back to continue reading I got this overwhelming feeling of getting hooked on the first sentence... Over and over and again!The only things that were missing for me include more descriptions on what happens when Reuben touches s...

Warren Bull: I thought this was a fast=paced thriller with elements of several other genres woven seamlessly in. It hooked me early and held my attention throughout. I liked the humor and surprises along the way. I really enjoyed the novel. I am not a big fan of romances or paranormal works,but when those ele...

{{ contest.story_page_sticky_bar_text }} Be the first to recommend this story.

About Us:

Inkitt is the world’s first reader-powered book publisher, offering an online community for talented authors and book lovers. Write captivating stories, read enchanting novels, and we’ll publish the books you love the most based on crowd wisdom.