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THE UNSEEN

By Qiuzy All Rights Reserved ©

Horror / Fantasy

WISHES - PILOT

A cold win rattled the window in the Dinner Inn, and Sue stared out of the dark street. Snow gathered on the ground and she said a quick prayer hoped that today the snow doesn’t came in the rush.

“I don’t believe he invited us to this place for the re-united” Sue finally talked to me, Sue is my friend, she was a cheerleader captain in our senior high school. One day, she just left the cheerleader club and came to us to joined our club without any reason and back then I finally know that Sue was joined our club because she was in love with Alden. Alden was a very handsome and brave man. He was our captain, and he could seen a real ghost, that’s why joined the horror club could be so interesting.

“Neither I, he just disappear after he went to the college and now, he wants to meet us.” It’s weird. I thought. James was a clumsy person. He never talked to us, never share any stories to us. I don’t even knew why he joined our horror club in senior high school. When we graduated, he moved to Austria with Alden, and a years after that, we never heard about them again. I just don’t believed that he now invited us. He must changed so much in Austria.

“Hi Allison it’s been a long time” Robert and Grey came together. Robert is my ex boyfriend and we never talked after we broke up on the graduation, but he seems fine right now. He kissed my cheek and sat beside me while Grey sat beside Sue.

“Long time no see guys” Grey smiled to us, “FYI, Robert still single” he added while he stared at me and made Robert and Sue smiled. Jerk!

“Hi Guys” James came to the Dinner Inn and he looked so confident while I felt so strange. I just felt that the atmosphere in this room changed after he came. Not because he is confident now or he looked handsome with his height or his manner, no! It’s not that feeling. He is just looked creepy?

My friends was standing and talked to him, except me. I just sat in there, feeling so bad. I don’t know my feelings never wronged. So if I felt something strange, I believe it must been something.

“Did Alden didn’t came with you? I thought you would came with him” said Robert. Robert and Alden was a real best friend. He looked disappointed that Alden never contact us no matter how long we sent a message for him.

“We didn’t contact each other after the graduation on the college.. Sorry for disappointed you” James looked so confident while saying that. I just don’t think that he really is felt sorry or something.

“I think I must to go to the toilet now” I cut those conversation and went to the toilet tostart sent a message to Alden. I know we weren’t talk to each other now, but maybe just maybe… he could reply and relieved my bad feelings about James.

‘Hi Alden, how r u doing?‘ I waited Alden to answer my chat but he is not, so that I go to our table and they looked very enthusiasm when James talked to them.

“Hi Al, come on sit down here. James had a great horror stories” Sue looked so excited, maybe it wasn’t because the story, I knew Sue very well, it because James was so handsome.

“Okay, since everybody is here now, I will tell you my stories”


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