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By I_am_the_phoenix All Rights Reserved ©

Mystery / Horror

Chapter 1: Void

"They aren't real." Silence. The creak of a door. The shuffling of footsteps.

"Don't come one step closer!" Silence. The darkness consumes every corner. If there were corners. But there isn't, only the infinite stretch of void. I ask myself where the footsteps are coming from. I try to look at my pale hands. However, I can't see. Why does such a place like this exist? Why am I in it? Who am I?

I don't focus on my questions when I hear the creak of old wood.

"Who are you?!" I scream at the pit of darkness. The shuffling stops. I start to think that maybe I am right. Maybe I am alone, and that whatever I think is coming for me is really just my imagination. Perhaps this could be proof of my insanity. Maybe-

I feel a cold, stiff hand on my shoulder. I don't move. My small frame instantly stiffens at the contact. I feel a cold breath on my neck, making my hair stand on end. The creature- the thing behind me, moves closer to my ear. "You can't run here." It whispers in a low rumble. I shiver at the words.

Every muscle in my body had decided to stiffen, but I can't help the rush of adrenaline making my heart beat out of my chest. I want this nightmare to end! Tears run down my cheeks as a bloodcurdling scream echos into nothingness.

And then I start to shake. Light suddenly appears. I look behind me to see what exactly was there...

But there is nothing.

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