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The AfterBeing

By ericsasia All Rights Reserved ©

Thriller / Horror

Chapter 1

January 26th 3am, into the unknown world I set adrift as I await for sleep to catch on. I am dropped off in a slightly cold world that has a distant diagonally placed black and green merged source of light. There is a scary sound of falling pebbles therefore a larger source of them must be existent nearby. I am scared of exploring but also weary of staying fixed in one position incase of being watched by whoever owns this vast loneliness. I start my careful steps that lead me to a rock structure with the silhouette of man carved into it - this seems to be the only path to the other side so I place myself into the carving and with a slight rumble end up liquidating the rock entrance, straight through and it solidifies again; I have no idea about the criteria permitting one to go through and cannot stay there to find out so I push on. I get to a bridge made of mucus-like material with a tender vibration and upon touching it once, realize that it is a one way bridge as it all crumbles upon my completion of the crossing - underneath it all lay on estimate hundreds of sets of distant eyes and muffled shrieks but I had no intention of being part of that parade. The setting shadows off into a zone of sparsely spaced burning rainfall and here is where I meet my first other beings who I initially observe as they fail to navigate the rain and walk to the end of the zone only to reach as skinless characters falling to their demise.

I master the art of the rain dodging and proceed to the area of falling pebbles only to realize that they are solid matter from the black and green light source gathering at the bottom of a previously darkened pit to become the reborn light source as the entire ground flips around to worship the energy source - it is a race of time and endurance as the pebbles touch the skin and attract other incoming pebbles to build around the being and drag you down with them. I barely make it across this pandemonium to be welcomed by a stretching hand - the owner purely invisible but with a sinister laugh in the far background. I take the hand, pull it towards the falling pebbles and as they accumulate to pull it down then form my convenient enough bridge to a zone of pure bliss or so I assumed. On sighting a pool of clear water I head to take a gulp and in the nearby distance observe a being transform into black and green matter which then levitates into an upward cave system on immediate ingestion of the water I was craving. I make my way through the ‘garden’ and finally get to a zone with a stone structure exactly as the first and with a smile of relief as the rock melts away for my progression, I sadly realize the loop system operating within this abyss with the only difference being the reduction of size in the source of light - we start all over again and it seems to be demanding more failure for its survival. I am glad to wake up to this morning far from that symbolism for our constant tribulations to be faced if we persist on the same path of ‘livity.'

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