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By madragon All Rights Reserved ©

Thriller / Horror

It will start again

I loved midnight walks. I had a lot of time to clear my mind. the empty streets weren't a downside either. People often stare at me and I liked the vacantness. But one night, that night is the reason I don't go out any more.

I was walking when this person who literally comes out of nowhere grabs me by my shoulders and starts to shake me.

"you have to help me! I finished this 10 times but I keep coming back!", he pleaded and I realized his eyes were basically bulging out of his face.

He's probably a druggie,  is the first thought that came to my mind before I forced him to sit down on the curb. Since he was basically a twig, it was easy to push him down. I continued my walk but the second I turn and face the direction I was walking in, a needle jabs my neck and the world around me blurs.

I wake up with a bag over my head and my arms tied behind my back. When the bag is lifted, I see five other people also tied up, and three people with black masks and guns in hand. My heart immediately begins to race just by looking at the guns.

"We have simple task for you five lucky piggies", he chuckles with an evil voice.

I reconize one of the tied up men as the guy who stopped me in the street. It's his fault I am dragged into this!

The captor continues, "all you have to do is stand up, walk through that door", he says pointing to an oak door, "And bring whatever is inside."

sounds simple enough, so why dot they do it?

"you first" says the captor and he pulls up the druggie by his color. he breaks the cord around his hands and he pushes him towards the door. He raises the gun making sure that the druggie doesn't try to run for it. The second the druggie opens the door, his screams fill the room. I cringe beause his blood curling screams echo in the room. The captor points at me and says, "You."

I'm hoisted up and thrown at the door. I stare at his and wonder whats behind it. I cautiously put my hand on the knob and twist. Nothing yet. calm down.

the second I open the door, an octupus  tentacle wraps around my waist and pulls me in.Instinct kicks in and I bite the tenacle and it drops me. I grab whatever  is infront of me and i run back to the door, but it's locked. InoI

The tentacle comes back and I scream.

I wake up with a bag covering my head and when it's lifted, I see five other people tied up, too.

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