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The Cold

By lord_of_all_fear All Rights Reserved ©

Fantasy / Horror

Where am I?

S-so cold, all I can feel is cold. It is extremely dark. There is nothing around me. Where am I? I don't remember ever coming here. "Can anyone hear me? Please answer!"

No answer.

Why am I here? What horrible thing did I do to be here? I begin to look around for an exit, but find nothing. Nothing. Nothing but my thoughts and cold. Now I can't even hear my thoughts over the storming, cracking sound. I have to get out. Out. But there is no way, no way to escape. Then I saw it, the giant being, almost...human. It begins to sprint frantically at me. Terrified, I lock up and my mind goes blank. Run, I have to run. While running I eventually come to a room with a baseball bat sitting in the corner. I grab it and maniacally bash the horrific thing's head in until the pains in my arms were unbearable.

In this strange room I find a trapdoor leading to a withered corridor, that seemed to be growing by the second. After walking for an eternity, I come across two doors, one door looked brand knew, and the other looked like it just came out of garbage truck. Well, from experience usually the door that is in the best condition has something bad behind it, so I went through the ugly door. Boy, was I wrong.

Crushing everything in it's path, what appears to be a gorgon sprints on all fours. And that's all I remember. Now I'm somewhere worse...... I knew the day I died I would go to a form of hell, but I did not expect this. So now I warn you. Don't go into the light.

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