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haunted is in the eye of the beholder

By BatoutofHell821 All Rights Reserved ©

Thriller / Horror


Every neighborhood has one: the haunted house which isn’t really haunted, but which everyone avoids anyway. My house is that house. I peek out my window and watch as people cringe while walking past.

They don’t see me. They can’t see me. But I see them.

I see Mr Parker with his girlfriend while his wife is away on business.

I see Mr Parker’s son tease his brother mercilessly.

I see the other son beat the neighbor’s dog to death.

I see that son walk slowly back to the house.

I see him. I see the emptiness in his eyes.

I hear the screams as he attacks his brother.

I hear the shrieks of his father’s girlfriend, the shouts of the father.

Then I hear silence.

Then I see the ghost of the boy who used to be a good kid.

But yet it’s MY house that’s haunted. If only they could see what I see.

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