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loving father

By BlackRose @--%--- All Rights Reserved ©

Thriller / Horror

world is changed

I was loving father, you know? i would have done anything for my wife and kids. But the world has changed and the change is not for better . I had the most beautiful wife any man could have and the most brilliant and bright kids , but then things changed .

 My kids started to get bullied in school . it was awful . i don't know if you understand how i felt when i saw the faces of my little children . The pain and suffering. Man looked down and wiped tears from his eyes. Please Mr . Koch continue when you can said person sitting in shadows. 

 My wife was excellent nurse but then economy went down and she was let go due to financial issues. i watch her become shadow what she used to be. surroundings in my home became like one's from funeral that never ends. It started eating me from inside and after time i felt everything go dark.

 Then arrived "the night". man went silent again. person in shadows watched his eyes turn to almost black in the gloomy light of the room. " the night" ? what do you mean by that? the person asked . "the night" when it all got better. no suffering. no tears. just pure peace . i stayed up after everyone went to sleep-my wife with pills -like usually now days. 

After arranging my thoughts for awhile and watching the wind moving the tree branches outside it went black. black? person from shadows asked after moment of silence . yes black. i don't know how to say it better. when the black was gone it was daytime again. my house was silent , eerily silent.

 i walked from bedroom to bedroom and felt in peace . FINALLY after so long time i had peace. and from what i  saw in their pale faces and staring eyes they were at peace to. so you see i was great father. man started laughing and moving in restless way. the echo of his laugh started to sound like one of an madman.

 the person in shadows stood up and took something in her hands . something shining in the gloomy light of the room. there ,there Mr. Koch just try to relax this will work soon enough. lightly the nurse put Mr. Koch on his bed and injected the drug in his arm.

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