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Pit stop in Hell

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Pit Stop in Hell

My sister and Me were on a trip to visit my brother in Alaska. I have never been to Alaska before. My sister lets call her Kate has been to Alaska before but has never drove there. I was could not wait for the car trip. I had the new Poke'mon game, a ton of junk food. Every thing I will need to have a great time. We were driving from Edmonton to Ancrge (me and my sister live in Edmonton). We were going to try and drive the whole way there with out stoping for any but gas and bathroom breaks. My sister was driving for a good ten hours or so before I took over. We were in the middle of Bumfuck nowhere. I think some where in the Yukon. We had a GPS to tell us where to go, so I just followed it waiting for my turn to drive to be over.

It was late by now about 11:30 or something like that. But I loved to stay up late so it was no problem. Kate on the other hand has never stayed up later the 11:00 in her life. Well maybe the more I think about she has stayed up later then that a few times. She could never fall asleep in cars so she took some sleeping pills. Now I have been driving for a long time it was about 1:00 AM. That is when weird shit started to happen! It started to get light out. It look like the sun was setting even thorough that could never happen because it had set already. You now what that looks like it dark but light still. I just keep driving and driving. The snow started to get thiner and thiner. Then the snow was gone.

It was 2:00 when things got really fucked up. I was going up a hill and when I started to come down I saw a field not very scary I know but it was what was in the field that scars the shit out of me. People on crosses all covered in blood, the field was drenched with blood and these weird black humans (I mean like black black not brown) walking around and eating the people on the crosses. The sky was bright but it was red. Shaking my sister to get her awake I remember that she had took the sleeping pills. Freaking out I sped way past the speed limit finally I made it back in the forest still seeing people hanging from trees and hiding behind rocks I kept speeding. Everthing started to seem normal when my sister woke up the sky was still red. She pasted it off as some weather thing. Kate asked if I wanted to pull over and switch but I said no. I was not going to tell her what I say because she would think I'm crazy. There was no way I was going to stop. Well there was one way I was going to stop if I needed gas. I figured I would keep going until I found a town. The was a sign that said you now entering *****. I not going to give you the name I don't want any one going there. I still going to have nightmares about what I saw in the gas station.

Back to the story, I entered the town and there was a gas station right there I pull over and told Kate to fill up the car and I will get chips from the station. When I enter the station it looks different I can't really explain it just looked different. I look at the shelves see food with weird letters on them. I go up to. The counter to ask what is going on when with the food. I then saw jars on the counter they we're filled with human figures, feet, teeth and even dicks. Still being shocked I just stood there. I then heard Kate scream I run out side and see the hose is shooting out blood. Fuck Fuck Fuck! We were filling our car with fucking blood. We get in the car and lock the doors. This when I told Kate what I saw in the files and in the station. She turns the key and the car starts don't ask me how this worked but it did.

We drove right out of the town all the way to our brother's house with out saying a word. We never talked about what happened I think we both wanted to forget. I think we made a pit stop in hell if you ask me.

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