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“Wasn’t there a horror movie based on this?” sneered Cassidy, joining her boyfriend and her two friends on a brick porch. It offered little relief from the blaring desert sun of Utah. “I believe it was a lesbian horror movie.”
Alyssa fumbled with the keys to the front door. “I hate labels for movies. A DVD cannot be straight, gay or bisexual.”
“Isn’t there a horror movie were friends go to a little house out in the country and a killer comes after them?” asked Cassidy.
Cassidy knew she was as subtle as a splinter about the movie, but when she had a bisexual friend, that movie HAD to come up. Why? Not even Cassidy knew the answer. “Haute Tension.” Alyssa’s voice croaked, as smooth as sandpaper.
“And wasn’t there a lesbian in it?”
Alyssa sighed, she really wanted to scream. “Yes.”
“Don’t go all lesbo on me,” said Cassidy as Alyssa put the key into the lock. “Wouldn’t be fair to Andrew.”
Andrew and Alan looked about Utah from the porch, it looked about as exciting as an empty movie theater. “Like I would,” hissed Alyssa. The desert that was around them all was basically an ocean of dust. “If my OCD allowed it, I’d have a new girl crush.”
“On me?” asked Cassidy. “I know you would.” Cassidy, standing there in all her bright colored clothes, impossibly beautiful, look radiant standing in the afternoon sun of Utah.
Alyssa groaned as she opened the door to her late grandfather’s farmhouse. She came from a long line of famers on her mother’s side of the family. This farm was located in a small town of Utah. The reason Alyssa and three city dwellers were there was because they wanted to write scary stories; well, not Alyssa’s fiancé, he just wanted to spend time with her.
Alyssa looked at fiancé and her friend and her boyfriend. “Before I show you the bedrooms, Andrew and I get the room downstairs with the TV,” she said. “I brought along my DVDs and they will be watched.”
“Well, as long as you don’t mind taking your clothes off during them, I have no issues with this,” smiled Andrew.
“You are such a perv,” groaned Cassidy.
“Hey, I don’t allow him a shirt,” purred Alyssa. Alyssa was drooling, she was hungry for Andrew’s body.
“Alyssa, where is the bathroom?” asked Alan, his voice taking on a sudden edge.
“Through the kitchen, why?”
“I need to vomit.”
Hearing Alan needed to vomit made Cassidy’s stomach go cold, and that cold spread to where it touched her heart. “Is everything okay, baby?” gasped Cassidy.
“I just imagined those two doing it to a horror film,” burped Alan.
MusketeerAdventure: Well - I really enjoyed this very much! The whole idea of a shared haunting really intrigues me. I thought you did a wonderful job; and I really liked the idea of hearing from the first ghost's point of view. It would be interesting to read more about these two - and the ghost-busters that inf...
Trahelion: While I started this tale hoping for an actual Anthropophagi monster story, I was quickly reminded that humanity is by far the most frightening beast. The reason being, we're real and there is not much we haven't done.Great work here, and at the end, I was expecting the lady narrating to be lying...
Alex Rushmer: I read the first chapter, and I'm not sure I can handle anymore, but I certainly liked what I read. The idea of the drug, Fortis, was very interesting, and I enjoyed how you conveyed its effects. The beginning is very intriguing. I think I'd like to see you do a little more with the main characte...
Kiz16: After a truly shocking start to the story, I found the style and content slowed down as the author introduced a varied group of characters who I thought were fleshed out very well. After a slow couple of chapters, I found this story difficult to leave with the tension growing within the house. Yo...
Bailey_Simms: So. As of my writing this review, "Deep Trouble" is the most popular story among those submitted to the current Inkitt horror contest. I guess it's best not to lie: I read this story primarily because I wanted to check out the competition. (There's your full disclosure, first, before anything el...
Alex Rushmer: I like the intrigue that you introduce from the very beginning of the story. The idea of the girl waking up in the alley with no memory of how she got there and with injuries is very interesting. It was very well done. There were a lot of grammatical errors that need to be fixed though. I think t...
Sarah_M_G: This story was truly gripping from start to finish. The way the author used Scottish dialect throughout the novel really helped to put you in he in the place where it was all happening. Every character was well described and thought out. How they all fitted together really worked and loved how t...
FreakyPoet: "you made me laugh, made me cry, both are hard to do. I spent most of the night reading your story, captivated. This is why you get full stars from me. Thanks for the great story!"
Sara Joy Bailey: "Full of depth and life. The plot was thrilling. The author's style flows naturally and the reader can easily slip into the pages of the story. Very well done."