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Comb, comb, comb your hair.Your smiling face is a reflection beyond. Mother’s voice echoes, intimidating, “Shin, please, stop disentangling your hair! It’s irritating. It’s bald.”
“Mom!” you replied, angry as you comb those tiny hair.
Wind, wind, it feels ominous. Your stomach’s inside scrambles, you’re bowel loses control. Your face deforms salty.
Fast, fast—run outside the house. Go, and head to the toilet and open the door. Shhh... don’t speak, don’t be shock, don’t yell; if that curling thing will awake, it will bite your life.
Way back to the kitchen— “Mom. There’s a snake near the faucet’s pipe,” you said. You’re scared. Your buttocks sway with bowel’s distortion.
Whooshing, as she rakes and rakes the vegetables inside the frying fan. Whoooosh, whoooshing... “Where’s your father?”
“He isn’t around.”
“Ask your uncle then.”
“(Whine) Uncle, uncle, there’s a snake near the faucet in the toilet.”
“Has green skin, but red eyes.”
“Jeez, ignore it. It won’t bite.”
Nooo! You cry and cry, and cry.
Be brave. Be brave. Just cry, hum as you cry.
Set above the toilet’s bowl.
See? It isn’t awake.
Please, don’t hesitate. Do it, your body must do.
Oh, it moves. It sways. It awakes. You cry with salty smile. Oh, its head moves. It crawls. It heads to the faucet.
Run! You run!
“(Whine) uncle, uncle, the snake is moving. I can’t poo!”
“Jeez, are you not a man? If its tail isn’t red, you’re safe.”
Smile, and cry. Bitterly smile.
Open the door, oh the snake is behind the bowl. Endure, endure it. Become a man. Slowly set back. Stop! It moves. Oh, it settles. Slowly, slowly set back. Now do, what your body must do... Oh, it moves... oh, it settles. Oh, it moves.. oh, it settles.
Its eyes, its glistering red eyes, Its eyes, its glistering-!
Oh, its tail is red. Flush the bowl, run!
Whine and whine, “Uncle, uncle, (whine), its tail is red.”
Brave as he is. Manly as he is. He arms with a bolo knife. He grabs the snake’s neck and he smashes it head. He smashes and smashes, until it’s dead.
He throws it to the forest. ”I feel sorry with the snake, it didn’t do bad thing,” your uncle said. You’re guilty. “Kid, if it’ll rain; that snake will come alive and take revenge.” You’re afraid, you’re paling. “Just kidding.”
“Maaa!” You whine and whine. Your uncle now is helpless.
Jason Phang: I'm pretty new to Inkitt (this is only my 4th book) and I must say I've been thoroughly impressed by the quality of the authors here. Remnants of Chaos is an excellently written book that hooks the reader, and doesn't let go. There are some grammatical and typographical errors, but nothing too se...
Jasmine Chow: As I read this story, I was reminded some what of Terry Pratchett, especially some descriptions of politics and economics. The sci-fic setting is quite intriguing. Writing style is quite lovely and grew on me slowly. I was also slightly reminded of Mark Twain, especially his book A Connecticut Ya...
maewilde25: I liked this, though it dragged on for over 200pages and heaven knows I did not expect the plot twist in the middle. David being Cristiãn. I was wondering when he would show up and didn't know he was there all along. it looks like there should be a sequel, please let there be a sequel. I know the...
Dina Husseini: I loved this story. It was so great that I did not expect it to be this awesome. I swear to you this deserves more than just 5 stars. Beyond amazing. Kept me wanting more and I felt exactly like Emma felt while reading. Although in the beginning I did not expect anything to happen. Then, when som...
Roxie: This was a very well thought out story and I greatly enjoyed it! I don't usually go for these kinds of stories because of clichés and what not, nut this was great. There were a few typos and grammatical errors, but that is to be expected. While I knew the overall end of the story It was engaging ...
Jazie Alyssa Flores: There may have been many grammar errors. But OMG this story had me on an emotional rollercoaster ride. I loved every bit of it. The relationship Sydney and Cameron had was beautiful. I loved how it wasn't a typical love story but revolved around a growing friendship and the drama that surrounded ...
Deleted User: (A review in progress). I like this. It's sparse, gritty and atmospheric - reminiscent of the classic Golden Age of American detective fiction of the Thirties. I've only read the beginning, but I'll definitely be back. This writer knows their stuff and has done their homework on detective work. T...
ianwatson: The comedy is original and genuinely funny, I have laughed out loud many times reading this book. But the story and the plot are also really engaging. The opening two or three chapters seem quite character-dense but they all soon come to life and there is no padding, filling or wasted time readin...