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Comb, comb, comb your hair.Your smiling face is a reflection beyond. Mother’s voice echoes, intimidating, “Shin, please, stop disentangling your hair! It’s irritating. It’s bald.”
“Mom!” you replied, angry as you comb those tiny hair.
Wind, wind, it feels ominous. Your stomach’s inside scrambles, you’re bowel loses control. Your face deforms salty.
Fast, fast—run outside the house. Go, and head to the toilet and open the door. Shhh... don’t speak, don’t be shock, don’t yell; if that curling thing will awake, it will bite your life.
Way back to the kitchen— “Mom. There’s a snake near the faucet’s pipe,” you said. You’re scared. Your buttocks sway with bowel’s distortion.
Whooshing, as she rakes and rakes the vegetables inside the frying fan. Whoooosh, whoooshing... “Where’s your father?”
“He isn’t around.”
“Ask your uncle then.”
“(Whine) Uncle, uncle, there’s a snake near the faucet in the toilet.”
“Has green skin, but red eyes.”
“Jeez, ignore it. It won’t bite.”
Nooo! You cry and cry, and cry.
Be brave. Be brave. Just cry, hum as you cry.
Set above the toilet’s bowl.
See? It isn’t awake.
Please, don’t hesitate. Do it, your body must do.
Oh, it moves. It sways. It awakes. You cry with salty smile. Oh, its head moves. It crawls. It heads to the faucet.
Run! You run!
“(Whine) uncle, uncle, the snake is moving. I can’t poo!”
“Jeez, are you not a man? If its tail isn’t red, you’re safe.”
Smile, and cry. Bitterly smile.
Open the door, oh the snake is behind the bowl. Endure, endure it. Become a man. Slowly set back. Stop! It moves. Oh, it settles. Slowly, slowly set back. Now do, what your body must do... Oh, it moves... oh, it settles. Oh, it moves.. oh, it settles.
Its eyes, its glistering red eyes, Its eyes, its glistering-!
Oh, its tail is red. Flush the bowl, run!
Whine and whine, “Uncle, uncle, (whine), its tail is red.”
Brave as he is. Manly as he is. He arms with a bolo knife. He grabs the snake’s neck and he smashes it head. He smashes and smashes, until it’s dead.
He throws it to the forest. ”I feel sorry with the snake, it didn’t do bad thing,” your uncle said. You’re guilty. “Kid, if it’ll rain; that snake will come alive and take revenge.” You’re afraid, you’re paling. “Just kidding.”
“Maaa!” You whine and whine. Your uncle now is helpless.
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CurlyRed: I read this entire book in just under 4 hours I COULD NOT PUT IT DOWN! i found myself emotionally attached to the characters and making personal connections that i had never experienced before while reading a book! I was constantly wanting to read more, every chapter left me on a cliff hanger tha...
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Jasmine Chow: As I read this story, I was reminded some what of Terry Pratchett, especially some descriptions of politics and economics. The sci-fic setting is quite intriguing. Writing style is quite lovely and grew on me slowly. I was also slightly reminded of Mark Twain, especially his book A Connecticut Ya...
summerstone: Seriously this is one of the best books I've ever read. The plot is intriguing, I love the narrative style. Its very descriptive and unique, with minimal cliches. It makes for a great read and the sequels are amazing. Totally worth reading. ^^ That's me trying to be professional. But in all hones...
Kiz16: After a truly shocking start to the story, I found the style and content slowed down as the author introduced a varied group of characters who I thought were fleshed out very well. After a slow couple of chapters, I found this story difficult to leave with the tension growing within the house. Yo...
jasminedazz: A very cute short story with a good balance of all elements. The writing is quite detailed giving a visual image of what is being read which quite a commendable quality in writing. Just a small pattern that I have noticed is that there is no paragraph breaker between events that have elapsed time...
Alex Rushmer: I just want to say that the writing in this is amazing! I read the first couple chapters and was absolutely drawn in by it, The way you use first person in this story is extremely engaging and does wonders with your character development. I immediately had a picture of the characters and plotline...
Ruby0h: Overall I thought your story was really good! It drew me in right away and kept me interested as the story progressed. I loved the character of Kayla being inserted into this story, and the way she affected and shaped the life of the original story into something totally new and interesting. I lo...
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Sara Joy Bailey: "Full of depth and life. The plot was thrilling. The author's style flows naturally and the reader can easily slip into the pages of the story. Very well done."