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The cell phone was ringing again. Florida summer heat brought in a wave of friends and family calling for favors, but this time it was Alvin.
With a sigh, Jay answered, “Hey Al!”
“Man, I hate to ask…” Alvin’s tone of voice was equal to a grimace on a face. “It’s my Air Conditioner…”
Rubbing his forehead, Jay retorted, “Lightning didn’t hit it again, did it?”
There was silence on the other end. The heat of Alvin’s frustrations coming through with no words needed.
“I’ll be right over,” sighed Jay.
Alvin was pacing in the driveway when Jay pulled up in his grey F150 complete with the ladder rack and toolbox. Jay got out, nodding a hello and followed him around to the side of the house. Charred panels and a spider web of yellow and burnt grass were tell-tale signs that lightning had indeed struck again. Living in Florida, we all knew lightning not only strikes twice, but also keeps striking the same spot until a rod was installed or the obstruction attracting it was removed. Rubbing the side of his jaw, Jay pondered over the situation his friend Alvin found himself in.
“Let me get this straight.” He started, crossing his arms and knotting his brow at Alvin. “Your wife’s car was hit the other week, and now the air conditioner has been hit twice.”
“Wife’s car has been hit twice, almost three.” Alvin flustered, hiding his face in his palms recalling the accounts in his mind.
Jay laughed, “You need to put a rod in or something.”
“I thought when they built the tall ass apartment complex next door it would stop, not increase,” cried Alvin.
Jay pondered on this. “You think you have minerals built up in the ground? Like a big pile of gold?”
Alvin laughed, “Florida doesn’t have gold deposits, but that’s most likely what’s happening. I wonder…”
Jay walked to his truck, pulling a shovel from the back. “Wanna start digging?”
Alvin shook his head in refusal, making a sour face. He held his chin stroking his goatee when he gasped with a sparkle in his eye. Diving into his garage, jumbling and clanking around, he reappeared with a metal detector. They both hovered over the dust-covered device, mumbling to one another on how ancient it looked. It was a family heirloom of sorts, but like Old Faithful, it turned on without fail with fresh batteries. Swiping about, both men grew excited as it screamed non-stop, announcing a large presence of metals, and possibly silver, lurking under the surface. It was all they needed to justified digging a hole.
Grabbing up his own shovel, Alvin and Jay picked the most favorable of the spots in the grass by the garage. The sun’s heat pounded down on them, the weight of it increasing with each toss of the dirt. Sweat dripped down their faces and arms. The silence between them gave way to an evening cicada squealing in an old oak across the street; it felt as if the insect was laughing at the grown men who were on a treasure hunt.
They looked to one another. Alvin had hit something solid, something metallic.
He had to make sure they weren’t imagining it the first time. Excited, they leaned down, hands digging and wiping. The metal object was large, smooth and round with white paint adorning it. Eager to see their prize, they grabbed the shovels up once more, widening the hole to make way for the unearthing of the massive metal dome.
Their efforts were slowing now, the object far larger than they expected. The wide curve was falling down further into the earth and the white paint broke apart and under the stain of dirt was some blue writing. Whatever it was, it was not gold nor silver; a steel object as large as a huge loveseat. They gave one another a bewildered look. Alvin scrambled for the water hose and Jay held the nozzle towards the muffled writing. Alvin spun the spigot, but Jay’s paling face and burst of laughter made him cut it off.
“What’s the matter? What’s it say?” He was marching back to the hole.
Jay caught his breath, “Tilt-a-whirl!”
Laughing harder, Jay teased, “Your house was built on a carnival ride graveyard!”
AASTHA SHARMA: really...one of the best novel i've ever read...a very touching story....really loved it...thanks for writing such a masterpeice...the struggle of the narrator but still remaining satisfied is the thing that i liked the most...another nice thing is the concept of talking with god...in short i wou...
ianwatson: The comedy is original and genuinely funny, I have laughed out loud many times reading this book. But the story and the plot are also really engaging. The opening two or three chapters seem quite character-dense but they all soon come to life and there is no padding, filling or wasted time readin...
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Destiny Lee: This is amazing. It's totally realistic - cool girls have flaws, too, okay?? Totally awkward girl picks up her mom's old bass from her garage, messes around, and realizes, hey, maybe I can move on after all. She has moments where everything's hopeless for her, after all, an alcoholic dad and a fl...
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Clare Cormack: Fantastic read! I was gripped from the beginning. The plot twist and change of gear stops you from putting it down. I enjoyed the way the individual characters had their own chapters, reading from their own point of view - believable and identifiable. Im really excited to read the sequel and have...
ArgyrisMetaxas: Thrilling story which builds layer ontop of layer. A few mis spellings every few chapters. What I found special was that it took a modern day problem and took it to its logical conclusion and plays this realism with gritting precision. I'm always on edge ready to shout from adrenaline. This is gr...
Books17: This is my first book review.I found the story to be very intriguing.The beginning of the story starts and you are immediately thrown into wanting to know what will happen next, The action, or intrigue is established early, so there isn't the feeling of the story dragging on, or thinking about wh...
JulieJeanette: I'm only on chapter nine, but so far I am loving this story!. I am on pins and needles hoping that they find good men in their lives by the end. I am American and so the British tone and lingo ('knickers,' 'sod it' ) of the book is very appealing. I had to find out how much '12 stone' was by goog...
ryder: This is an excellent read. From beginning to end the author showed his creative and imaginative writing skills. Twists and turns, surprises, humor, and sorrow: This book has it all. I strongly recommend this book, and I am already recommending it to my friends.
Priyanka Bhatia: My one of the most favorite movie is twilight this novel makes me remind the movie I was not able to take a break from reading superb novel , I would just love to read more novels by this author and it would be a cherry on cake if it would be something like this novel.😊
Kim Walker: The characters in this book was very well developed. It is very evident that the writer put q lot of thought and effort into his work. I thoroughly enjoyed it! The way he described the scenes, the plot, the setting is absolutely remarkable. Two thumbs up!
RodRaglin: Your writing is very good, Rachel, but remember you also have to entertain the reader and in that regard it's a bit sparse in action and dialogue.Consider when revising...When starting a new story always consider your protagonist's Goal - what they want; Motivation - why they want it; and, Confli...
CurlyRed: I read this entire book in just under 4 hours I COULD NOT PUT IT DOWN! i found myself emotionally attached to the characters and making personal connections that i had never experienced before while reading a book! I was constantly wanting to read more, every chapter left me on a cliff hanger tha...