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A good day gone wrong...?

By Tinaluvsunicorns All Rights Reserved ©

Horror / Mystery

Chapter 1

Ah yes... Morning! As any cheesy person would say...,"The birds were chirping, the sun was shining... how could this day get worse...?" I did my normal routine of brushing my teeth, combing my hair, running down stairs,-surprisingly with more energy than normal- and of course I had to yell down to my mom to ask whats for breakfast.

There was no answer, no one in the kitchen... complete silence... I thought my parents left me a note somewhere but didn't bother looking for it, assuming they stepped out and I had to walk to school. I didn't mind, maybe I needed fresh air...? I didn't notice I skipped breakfast nor was I hungry so I decided to just grab my bag , pack a few snacks in case I got hungry of course, and go off to school... It wasn't far of a walk, maybe 10-15 mins. Who knows what adventure could bring...?

I stand corrected. The walk was much longer than I thought, It seemed to drain all the energy in me. It felt as my feet were glued to the cement and my feet were killing me. I forced myself to keep walking.

After a while of what seemed to feel like forever... I saw the peek of the school bell just above the hill. That motivated me and my energy seemed to bounce back in me. I ran up hill as fast as I could, I finally reached the top but the school seemed farther than normal, and it looked like it was getting further an further with each step I take. I noticed that there was 10...NO 5 MINUTES TIL CLASS. HOW COULD TIME PASS SO FAST!?!? I dashed like I was running a 100 yard dash (this energy would be helpful in P.E or cross country... but that's not my main problem now.) I was about to give up when I noticed a beam of light, I followed it looking for the source but it seemed to have no source, it wasn't the sunlight...Before I knew it, I was right in front the school, but something felt different... It seemed dull, and lifeless. Well the light was gone, but I didn't really care, so I walked to class.

As I walked to class, The hall ways felt so...so...empty... there were people there, but they seemed to do the same thing at the same time, they seemed to walk in a saggy way. Everything seemed very dull, Should I worry...? Yes...? No...? Well I thought for a second... it's school... maybe it was just a bad start for some students...? I tried to ignore it. K101...K102..K103! I found my class. I reached for the door knob... You would think a normal person like me would just open it no problem...? SURPRISE! NOPE! My hand seemed to pass right through it. I jumped back startled for a second but didn't notice the girl behind me. She paused for a split second. I thought she was staring at me... I opened my mouth to say sorry but she walked right through me! How was this happening...? Could she even see me...? Did she notice me run into her...? My head hurt as I tried to process all this. I waved my hand over and over through the door knob... well it was clear I couldn't turn it to get in... but what if I could... No it wasn't possible, could it...? I attempted to walk right through the door hoping not to bang my head like an idiot.

I DID IT! but how...? How did I manage to walk through the door...? *Bell rings* Well I didn't time for that. I quickly went to my seat as I watched the room fill up. While I waited I experimented with the fact that I could go through things. Was I...Dead...? I waved my hand in front of the teacher's face as she walked by... "What are you doing...?"she asked. I looked around the room to find everyone staring at me... "Ummm..." I said as my face turned bright red. "I was... Shooing a bug... *Clap hands together with an awkward look...* hehe... I got it... She seemed to have a small anger in her face but proceeded down the aisle. "*cough* LOOSER" Someone said... I thought to myself... Great just great, a perfect sunny day and I humiliated myself...

The rest of the class time didn't appeal to me like before. I tuned out a lot but the teacher didn't seem to notice. I had people spitting spit balls at me that hit my neck or went down my shirt. It was wet, cold, and slimy. Some kid even tossed a note at me telling me that I was S.P.E.D ( special ed.) I somehow got really ticked off and ran out of the room. The teacher still didn't notice. (out of all the things, she didn't notice me now...?) I ran back home.... I didn't notice if my parents were home, nor did I care... I went to the bathroom...I looked in the mirror... Was I really a idiot?...was I worth it?... I tried to fill my head with "positive" thoughts... "I'm loved...I'm worth it..." but that only fed my anger more. Was I ever loved...? Or were those people just using me because they were bored...? What happened with my hand today...? All these questions and I wish I had an answer...

I was very angry at myself... I didn't know the answer to anything. I punched the wall... sure it hurt but I seemed to enjoy it at the time... I grew tired of it but I was still angry, so I slid the mirror cabinet open, the mirror broke at the force of me opening it... There it was... pills and blades. I suppose the blades would do for this anger, so I did it. "Scratching myself" over and over and over, blood spilled over on the floor, then the last thing I remembered was blacking out.

I "woke up"- or I think I did-... On the floor, but there was another body next to me. It looked familiar... almost like the name was on the tip of my tongue. Then it hit me. IT WAS MY BODY! I WAS THE BODY ON THE FLOOR! but wait...Why...?

I heard the gravel being crushed and car pulling up... It was my parents. What would they think of this...? Well I stayed to find out. I heard them... everything they did... Walking in the house... dropping things in the kitchen... walking up stairs... everything... They knocked (at least they were polite) and opened the bathroom door... I waited for their reaction... I saw my mom's face, it turned pale, ghost white, she stared at the body for a longggg time. It was almost like her soul left her body. My dad however was calm and cool and collective. He put his hands on my mom's shoulder and hugged her tight. She pushed him away and sat by my body... She cried, harder than I saw her before... Was I actually dead...? I tried to pick up the blade... my hand went right through it... I tried to hug my mom... I went right through her... it was disturbing yet sad.

I left the room because the moment was to sad for me to watch. I went downstairs to the couch... I just knew I was dead... I guess I lost to much blood...? Then, the jingling bells and scent of fresh cookies caught my attention... I turned around, maybe a little to quick. I almost lost my balance, then balanced myself. I saw 2 girls, about 16...? They seemed normal, but could they see me...? I was about to reach out and speak til one of them said..."Hi I'm Krystal, and that's Daxsi." I didn't mean to sound rude but in reply I said," You can see me...? My parents couldn't see me... why...?" Krystal told me how she watched me, my every move. She saw me scratching myself, she saw me run upstairs. She said in fact I did die, I fainted from lost of blood and died. My head spun... I didn't mean to kill myself... Would anyone even miss me...? I was about to ask more questions in curiosity when Daxsi and Krystal started to fade away... "This whole ghost world seems confusing" I said to myself...

I decided to go see my parents. They were in the room, Talking on the phone, I recognized my mom's voice anywhere. She was worried, her voice was shaky. I regretted everything now. It was still light outside so I went to see if anyone else missed me... I stepped out the door when I saw a kid, short like a 6 year old... With a blanket over her... was she playing dress-up like a ghost...? I was going to say hello when Daxsi came behind and yelled at me to back away. I could tell from her voice she really meant it seriously. I quickly did as I was told... I went as far as I could. Daxsi said," I'm not scared of you. I fought you before, I could do it again!" The ghost gave a beastly roar. I watched Daxsi fight the ghost... It bit her arm as she yelled out in pain, but she kept fighting. (Ghosts can feel pain...? There sure was a lot I needed to learn about the whole ghost thing...) Daxsi finally was able to remove the ghosts blanket. I jumped back in fear at the look of her face. It was full of wrinkles, blotchy, and her eyes were bruised and looked like she hasn't slept in days. I accidentally leaped back to far when I was caught before I tripped. It was another ghost.

He had dirty blonde hair, shiny blue eyes. He made me feel protected... "Hi" he said. I must've sounded like an idiot because he kept laughing at me. I realized that he was still holding me...(oops...) I got to my feet and was about to say hi when he opened his mouth and a light almost close to blinding me cut me off, as I know it he disappeared and I was on the floor. I was worn out, as I saw snow fall, I slowly closed my eyes... and fell asleep.

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