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Punctuating Life

By the_jlorraine All Rights Reserved ©

Mystery / Poetry

Preface

I typed

And the wall hit me.

Blinking and pressuring me to go beyond.

Thinking, my mind flashed through every road, every blank page that was gradually filled with colors.

Colors! In amazement I grew different.

Pondered I with curiosity

Just a bit more” says the ‘I

Cramming and still it’s blinking steadily

And in one movement of a finger,

splashed out a new world unveiled.

-Ideas in a Slash-
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Jessica: This was something that I was not expecting at all. The way things intertwined together-the stories of the different characters-was good and fit together. I would fix up the writing and punctuation of the story. Overall, interesting and a good read.

dimitriwarlamow: I really liked the chapters about the military training and the murders. My girlfriend got me to read the book and I'm glad she did. The characters were all believable. I'll definitely tell my friends that it isn't just a book for the ladies.. Those murder scenes were very clever and the whole st...

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Ginger: I like the idea behind this; the idea and story itself are great, However, I'm finding typos periodically and some of the sentences could be worded a bit more clearly. You might want to 'show' a little more than you 'tell,'

Ilanea Zavala: I loved it and well I really hope you continue writing more to the story.

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Deleted User: I love your use of writer's craft and how you use figurative language to enhance your writing. It great how you didn't have any spelling or grammar issues.

angel18: great story! can't wait for the next book! for me, characters are well thought of and is very catchy, story line so far is great. could do a little more careful tho on grammar and punctuation (i hope in the next book it will be less to none), but it's so minimal you could still relate. but overal...

Warren Bull: I thought this was a fast=paced thriller with elements of several other genres woven seamlessly in. It hooked me early and held my attention throughout. I liked the humor and surprises along the way. I really enjoyed the novel. I am not a big fan of romances or paranormal works,but when those ele...

FixieGirl: This is a good story so far. Most of the stories I've read, the earth kids are brought to the fantasy world but why not the opposite? I promised I'd read this on fanfiction and I'm impressed. I will be happy if you continue.

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