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And Then There Were Eight

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And Then There Were Eight

We were all waiting

To see what it was

For we were hating

Not knowing the cause

It was a strange sickness

That hit her like that

She lost all her thickness

Not one pound of fat

Now we were about to discover

How to fight this disease

And if my grandma could ever recover

Or if she'd leave us the keys

We were nine in the room

While the doctor was working

My parents said kids go resume

Your games of hiding and lurking

And so we went,

Me and my two sisters

With our parent's consent

To earn some new blisters

But once we came back

To the dark and gloomy room

They were all dressed in black

Wearing an expression of gloom

I saw her lying on the bed,

At peace with her fate

A few tears were shed,

And then there were eight.

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