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A blank canvas hung across the wall, crisp and clean. Not a single mark upon its virgin skin. Onlookers begin to gather, flooding the hall, taking their seats and snickering to themselves.
The sound of creaking doors halt their conversations. Silence captures the scene as two figures enter. One of black and the other of white. Both carried themselves with grace as they entered from either side.
“Welcome again,” the dark figure bellowed, turning towards the eager audience, “Life has been created once more and so again we must duel.” Darkness was her name.
Light, the white figure speaks, “Shall we begin?”
“Now, now,” Darkness chuckled, “I won’t let you win.”
Both stared into each other’s eyes, willing the other to show a sign of vulnerability, to glance away.
“I will not let this child’s life fall into your hands,” responded Light. “I will keep her safe.”
With grief and pain etched into his eyes, Light smiled at the child he painted. “I promise.”
Light gained the upper hand and painted a happy childhood and school life, warding off any attempts Darkness made to intervene.
He would not allow her to add her mark upon the colour filled canvas.
Darkness kept to herself knowing full well to wait her turn. Or at least the opportune moment to strike. Darkness leapt upon Light and removed the brush from his hands. His magic faded instantly.
“My, how underhanded,” Light shrieked. “Return it at once!”
Darkness said nothing, a sly smile crept upon her lips. Dangling the stolen item inches away from its owner, she snapped the brush in two.
Light collapsed to his knees, his breathing laboured.
“Don’t fret, my dear.” She’ll be safe in my hands,” Darkness smirked and planted his brush upon the canvas. Black surged over colour and the life of the young girl, now a young woman raced into turmoil. Her job failed, she fell into debt and all Light could do was watch.
Darkness lifted her finger, her long bony finger, and tore down the centre of the canvas.
“She ends here,” Darkness teases, “and victory shall be mine.”
The woman in the painting lay in her room. No light managed to pry its way through the curtains. Her eyes glazed over as she pulled a kitchen knife towards her.
Darkness finished her stroke and the woman plunged the cold blade into her flesh. Red streamed from the canvas.
Darkness had won.
The onlookers applauded and left without a word. Their entertainment was over.
“You know, there is no good in this world,” Darkness mused. “This world is trapped in Limbo!”
She removed the painting and carried it to her side of the room. The wall filled with millions of life lines she had conquered.
On the other side, Light’s side, there hung two images.
“Until next time,” Darkness bid her foe adieu.
In a world trapped in darkness. Only darkness can win.
RodRaglin: Your writing is very good, Rachel, but remember you also have to entertain the reader and in that regard it's a bit sparse in action and dialogue.Consider when revising...When starting a new story always consider your protagonist's Goal - what they want; Motivation - why they want it; and, Confli...
FreakyPoet: I found this story well written and extremely cute. I like how the emotional roller coaster, otherwise know as love, was done here. it was very believable that these two characters would deny, agonize, then come to except their feelings the way that they did. I enjoyed it very much, thank you ...
Lydia Sherrer: I first read The Speaker almost a decade ago when I first discovered author Sandra Leigh. I loved it then, and I still love it now. It is a simple, easy read, yet deep in meaning and rich in storyline. I do not know what kind of research or prior knowledge Leigh has of First Nation tribes, but sh...
RedX9: I would love it if you would show how she is the bottom of the class. A paragraph alone isn't enough to show this.If she was such a screw up, how did she pass and graduate from the class. Are her teachers this lax that they would allow a screw up to graduate?I didn't understand the schooling syst...
Patrick Johns: The Prince was an exciting read. I enjoyed the spoiled bratty protagonist and his drastic change through out the story. The world building was well though out and clear. The author did a great job painting a picture for the reader without having a map. I liked the connection to real life leaders....
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Bella_Lee_Taylor: the plot of the story is good and I can't wait to read the second book, but you need to check your grammar because as I was reading there were were important parts of the story some of the spelling and grammar were out of place and the way you you worded things can be better but I can see that th...
MissMadokaKaname: I was impressed and moved by this work. The characterization and dialog were strong, and really brought everyone in the story to life. Also, the setting was handled in a believable and compelling way. The story captured the complexities and pain of love, and also the harshness of living in such b...
milu: every chapter you find something new or you unravel a mystery.hatsoff to your writing style.the story revolves around the truth of abelia.we start each chapter hoping that atleast in this chapter we will find about the truth.it is that curiosity which draws us into reading this.
Jacklyn Reynolds: As a mother of an Autistic child, I know how hard it can be. I love how beautiful you made everything. That's all I can say. I need to grab a tissue.
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Books17: This is my first book review.I found the story to be very intriguing.The beginning of the story starts and you are immediately thrown into wanting to know what will happen next, The action, or intrigue is established early, so there isn't the feeling of the story dragging on, or thinking about wh...