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My Ocean Blue

By astroshadow All Rights Reserved ©

Poetry

Chapter 1


I'm struggling to keep
my head above the water
I sink into depression
And I see how it's pathetic
I feel like an idiot
every time I ask for help
to keep myself afloat
All attempts to keep from drowning
just drag me further down
Down into the Ocean Blue
I have no business above water
If i stay I will shatter
And so I sink on down
Down into the Ocean Blue
I have no business above water
If I stay I will be left behind
I can't keep up
I can't stay above the water
I sink into depression
There is no lifeguard
to save me now
The waves come crashing down
I crumble underneath their weight
And now slowly I will drown
All attempts to keep from drowning
just drag me further down
Down into the Ocean Blue
I have no business above water
If i stay I will shatter
And so I sink on down
Down into the Ocean Blue
If I stay I will be left behind
I will drown but never die
I will drown but never die
I will sink into the Ocean Blue
Staying above will shatter me
And the world will leave me behind
And I will be left
to drown deep down
in the Ocean Blue
My shattered pieces sink into
the depths of my despair
My only friend
is this Ocean Blue
That keeps me up
but drags me down
This Ocean Blue
My Ocean Blue

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