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Sun Fell Down

By itsnotnatural All Rights Reserved ©

Poetry / Fantasy

Chapter 1

The sun, the sun, it fell down again
Get ready for everlasting night
Purposeless were his warnings to the people
Because he had always lied

Faceless horrors from another place
They will be coming very soon
Now I must say that this sounds very outlandish
Especially during this boon

And even those people that believed his words
Felt that they were well defended
With their guns, grenades, and baseball bats
They might as well just have pretended

There isn't much to do now except sit down and wait
And watch as they rush through the streets
Assuming they were killing everyone while they're at it
He was shocked when he heard the beat...

Up, down, around he could hear the laughing shrieks
And he was stunned when he saw them...

Chorus

They built a fire
And danced around it
And invited the humans to join
All holding hands they watched it burn
All while doing a jig

They passed 'round the alcohol
And told everyone their story
He tried to make sense of it all
Everyone was celebratory

Everyone please just hear me out
They're all just trying to trick you
With their generosity and pleasantries
Then some guy turned around and said "Fuck you!

None of us need your goddamn warnings
So why don't you just go to hell?"
"Your already here goddamn you!
Don't tell me that you couldn't tell?"

Up, down, around they looked in all directions
He was shocked when they said "Party in hell!"

Chorus

Bridge

The fires rose higher
In this hellish empire
As they all danced with glee

Hypnotization
Became mesmerization
As he began to see

The flames became less
As the winds caressed him
Slowly becoming relaxed

Of the demons' appearance
Disappearance of fear-enhanced
Features had become fact

Chorus

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