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Alone along the halls,
Observing who stands and who falls.
Beaten by those who boast power
And revolted by strangers.
Ruling their little worlds –
Do they even care? No, I haven’t heard.
It’s amazing how no one stands by me.
No one does - But no, I’m still not free.
I need someone to see –
See how reality’s killing me.
To take the pain way,
Assuring me everything’s okay.
I imagine how life would be,
If everyone’s actually jolly.
If no one else wonders how it seems
Then being lonely is fine with me.
It’s better to be on your own
Than to keep up with their hatred souls.
Acting like we are all clicking
But all we need is fixing.
~ P. M. Roya
preety_lady_serenity: I really liked the poem. It created this picture of a baroque style cafe that you kind of enter it to feel relaxed and yet you feel trapped due to outside circumstances.I especially loved the writing style, If one looks at it, it does look like a birdcage which is an excellent image to fit the po...
Alex Rushmer: Honestly, poetry is not really my thing, and I don't have a lot of feedback that I can give. However, I thought that this was written powerfully in a way that affects the reader. Just don't mistake depressing for being the same as deep. You can have one without the other. This is only my opinion,...
novicemaster: The imagery in this prose poem is glorious. I love the way you manipulate words. You seem to have harnessed them to bend to your every whim. The slightly archaic ones like "whilst" make this resemble a fairytale. The entire idea of a prose poem is brilliant. I didn't get the ending at first, but ...
CalvinPeat: This is a great concept, and you've done a largely excellent job of capturing the voice of Mal.You convey Mal's inner struggle well. Perhaps, though, you could reflect the hope in verses 13-17 of Psalm 90 a bit more. A suggestion: in the current version, Mal seems to be losing hope in the idea of...
Laraine Smith: My only suggestion on the grammar is to use www.grammarcheck.net. I have it bookmarked on Google Chrome. I see myself in the determination in this beautiful story! I have Cerebral Palsy, and I have dreams that I have been working hard for, too! The humor made me laugh!
WaywardKnight3: I liked this poem overall. It brought up a lot of thoughts to me about our place in the world and the place of the things around us. Plus I am proud to be of Scando lineage and perhaps that has a part to play in my enjoyment. Either way good work.