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A Smile

By Matt Mcbride All Rights Reserved ©

Romance

A Moment

It was a beautiful evening and I was on my way to the bus stop from hockey practice. The sun was setting beautifully in the sky and I was feeling happy. I soon got to the bus stop.

My heart skipped a beat. Cheesy, but I’m sure it must have as I came across something more beautiful than all of the sunsets together. A girl, sitting quietly on the bench. I had to talk to her. I would be beating myself up for weeks if I didn’t. I sat next to her and saw her look at me.

“I want to know her… I have to know her” I thought to myself. Giving myself a quick pep talk, I turned to her.

“Hey, I’m Matt,” I started. Her eyes grew wide. Had I said something wrong?

“Hello…I’m Deni,” she said hesitantly. She was watching me, her eyes roaming my body. I mean, I know I’m good looking but I want this girl to know me not my body.

“Like what you see?” I asked, laughing slightly. Time to turn on the charm.

“Of course, but, did it hurt?” Came the quick reply. I felt slightly confused at this, not sure where she was going with this question.

“Did what hurt?” I ask curiously.

“When you fell from heaven.” Again came a quick response and one that I could not help but laugh at. A cheesy but none the less cute line. I watched as her eyes lit up as I laughed. I couldn’t believe I had randomly bumped into such a beautiful girl. There must be a catch. She must have a boyfriend.

I was gonna take a chance! I leaned forward and took her hand. In a low seductive voice I stated, “Your boyfriend must be the luckiest guy in the world to have a gal like you.”

A slight blush spread over her face as she started rambling, “Actually, he wouldn’t be. I forget things a lot. Hypothetically speaking that is. If I had one. A boyfriend. But I don’t…”

I couldn’t help but grin at this. I had a chance, now only to seize it. I couldn’t let such a beautiful girl slip away.

"My lucky day isn’t it?” Keeping my voice low but I’m smiling as I watch her face continue to grow red. “Oh, yeah she likes me!” I think to myself.

“Y-yeah, mine too”, she stutters as I strain my ears to hear her response. I move closer to her slowly. I want to kiss her. The moment is now.

I lost track of time, of the people around us and continued to lean in all focus on her.

“BEEEEP!” a car honked as it passed by. My chance had been ruined. The moment had been ruined and there was no getting it back.

I had to do something else. Her number, maybe I could text her.

I turn towards her again and grinned, “I really liked talking to you, and I wouldn’t want us to just part like this. Wanna text later?”

“S-sure, here let me give you my number.” Again with the slight stutter. However, with her beauty so distracting, I’m surprised it wasn’t me that was doing the stuttering.

We quickly exchanged numbers as her bus arrived. I considered just getting onto the bus with her but decided that would be too much. I was going somewhere completely different so I had to stay.

But her grin stayed, imprinted in my mind.


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