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the pionist

By fallenbeauty All Rights Reserved ©

Fantasy / Romance

Chapter 1: The first time

Tip... tap... that is the only sound I've been able to hear for twelve years from tomorrow on-wards. All my life I have never heard anything else except from the loneliness of the tip tap, echoing through me like a stone dropped down a crevice. My life is burden that I struggle to carry but I've never lost hope, that's funny really, that was the name my mother gave me before she died, now I'm just called Jane, plain Jane.

I don't remember much of my mother but what I do remember is a beautiful woman who was always optimistic even after she was diagnosed with cancer. Sometime I try to imagine what she looked like, I was only young when she past away and the hospital tries to keep us happy but they can't fool everyone so it's something I do to pass the time.

I've always despised the hospital. People always feel sorry for me; even if all I can hear is the tip tap I can see pity in their eyes making me wonder, why was I ever brought into the world if the only thing I'm good at is, well...Waste others time.

Every day I wait for my glimpse of hope even though it was never gonna catch me before the end, that was what I thought anyway, but today was the day my life was gonna change forever, today was the day I felt that glimpse of hope coming ever closer, the day when not everything was lost...

my hand brushes against the mahogany wood, relieving me from the burden that has been clinging onto my shoulders for twelve years.

I sit down and press the first note, then one after another they flow out into a beautiful melody. By some miracle I can hear the music so I carry on; it all came naturally to me and held a strong place in my heart so why should I stop? The nurses and doctors gawp in amazement as I broke into a melodious song. For the first time in my life I felt free, nobody could pull me down, i was like a bird learning to fly, a baby taking it's first step.

After what seemed like hours of playing, I stop the music and smile at the doctors who where amazed just at the sight of joy across my face, let alone the fact I could play such an exquisite melody.I stand up and start walking to the exit, nobody could stop me now.

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