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First Demimortal

By Noizchild All Rights Reserved ©

Fantasy / Romance


The immortal Sachi falls for the beautiful Rika and decides to make her his.

First Demimortal

First Demimortal

Sachi looked out his window. Such a clear night tonight. But he didn't see the night. Sachi felt the need for a mate. Now, Sachi could get a date easily. He had the looks, charisma, and the skills. So what was the deal?

The answer was clear. Sachi was bored with the women in Ronahon, the place between heaven and purgatory. Immortal made up seventy-five percent of the population here. Sachi's own species bored him to death. demons were boring too. No chance in hell he could get with a vampire. So what's a young immortal to do?

Sachi looked on in boredom. Then, something caught his eye. It was a young woman in the living realm. She was really comely. The woman had hair of a raven in the sky. Her skin was pale and lovely. Her eyes were like rich wine. Oh! Her body was so lovely. Like a goddess! The water in the hot springs enhanced her beauty.

Sachi was drooling hard. But, he noticed something. This maiden was a mere human. Sachi was falling for a human. This has never happened before. Sachi just smirked. Well, he thought. It's worth a shot! Then he teleported down to the living realm.

The young woman was still bathing in the hot springs. She was alone in her world. Then, she saw something in the bamboo. The woman looked around.

"Hello?" she asked. No answer. The woman grew paranoid. She looked around frantically.

"Aw, tsk-tsk. Why are you so worried?" a voice asked. The woman looked up and saw a young man. His hair was short and a thick wine red color. He had the body of a god. And to top if off, this stranger was dressed in black and gold robes. Boy! He was fine!

Despite the fact she was blushing out of lust, the young virgin was startled.

"Who are you?!" she asked. Sachi grinned.

"I'm your fantasy, Rika," he said. The woman's panic shot up.

"How do you know my name?" she asked. Sachi stepped closer.

"I've been watching you. But don't worry, I'm not here to hurt you," he said. Rika still kept her guard up.

"What do you want then?" she asked bewildered. By now, Sachi was standing over her.

He knelt down to the virgin and said, "The only thing I want, is you." Rika stared at him hard.

"Me?" she asked.

"Yes," Sachi answered in a soft voice. Rika wanted so desperately to run away from him now. Sachi sensed it.

"I want to court you," said he. Rika now looked like a deer caught in the headlights.

"What?!" she asked. Sachi grinned.

"I want to court you," he repeated. The virgin was pale.

"But..." she began. "I... don't even know you." The immortal put his finger to her lips.

"That can all change," he said. "Just trust me." Rika began to feel easy.

And so their love affair began. It was rocky at first. Rika couldn't trust him at first. When she found out he was an immortal, her distrust grew. She would try avoiding him. But soon Sachi would catch on.

"Rika-chan," he addressed her in the woods one night. She ignored him. The immortal flew closer to her. The woman kept walking. Finally, Sachi teleported in front of her. Rika paused and eyed him.

"Why are you avoiding me?" Sachi asked at last.

"Know why?" Rika asked. "You're an immortal." Sachi was bewildered.

"So?" he asked. "What's wrong that?"

"Folktales," the human answered. That threw Sachi way off.

"What folktales?" he asked. Rika drew in a deep breath.

"You lie, kidnap, and kill-- for fun!" she blurted out. Sachi paused. Then he snickered softly. Rika caught him.

"What's so funny?!" she snapped. Sachi stopped laughing and eyed her.

"Tell me my dear," he said. "Do you believe them?" Rika froze.

"Uh... well..." the girl began. She blushed hard.

"You don't, do you?" Sachi asked. Rika thought hard. She finally shook her head. Sachi smiled.

"Well," he said. "Let's prove them wrong." Then the immortal lightly kissed her on the lips. Rika was taken-aback at first. But a passionate flame started. And Rika kissed back.

From there Sachi and Rika's relationship grew. But there was a catch. They had to keep their love a secret. Back then, it was considered taboo for a supernatural to be mating with a human. If caught doing so, you were heavily looked down upon. So one could see why Sachi and Rika tried to keep it low.

As they're love grew, Sachi's desire burned harder. He just had to have her. And he knew just how to do it. But, would she agree to it. ah, it was worth a shot!

Sachi came to Rika's window one night and tapped on the window. The virgin rushed to it quickly. She opened it quietly.

"Hi my dear." the immortal said. Rika grew nervous.

"What are you doing here?" she whispered.

"I really want you," Sachi replied. "I need you so badly now!" Rika was too stunned for words. Then the immortal let himself in. Rika's heart raced. What did he want?

"I really need you!" Sachi said. The virgin grew nervous.

"In what way?" she asked. The immortal stepped closer to her. He lightly stroked her cheek.

"Anyway possible," he answered. Then gave her a seductive kiss on the lips. Rika melted into passion and kissed back. Sachi lightly pushed her onto her bed. The virgin grew nervous.

"Relax," the immortal whispered. Then he began kissing on her neck. Even taking little licks as well. Rika moaned loudly. Sachi began stripping her down. Chills ran through Rika in her delight. She began stripping him down as well. Rika blushed at his hot body.

The couple ended up making passionate love all night. Rika enjoyed every moment of her first time. Sachi was enjoying it as well. The two slept sweetly in each other's arms. Sachi and Rika kept making love each night. But then a twist to the plot came.

"Sachi," Rika said one day. "I'm pregnant."

"What?!" he yelled. "By how long?"

"Two weeks." his lady said. Then she broke down in tears. Sachi held her close.

"Don't worry," he said. "I'll take care of you." Rika cried on his shoulder.

Sachi was stuck. Rika was pregnant. Now what? But, then another thought came to him. Rika and him would be the first species mixed couple to have a child. Ah, it's worth a shot.

Sachi went to Ronahon to persuade them to let Rika be with him in the living realm. They said no at first. But then Sachi explained his case. After three months, Sachi could live with Rika in the living realm forever.

Six months later, Rika gave birth to a son. He was named Ichiro. Years later, Sachi made Rika an immortal and married her. They had did the impossible: fall in love and have a child together.


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