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1. LEAVE IT IN THE PAST...
Another day of serving drinks. It’s in the evening, no one’s here yet, just me. I get the glasses ready and fix the bottles of wine, alcohol, and champagne. Our drinks are top quality, five star actually. The bar’s name is ‘Monique’s’. Not dedicated to anyone, I guess it sounded like a good name to Brennan...
Brennan is my boyfriend. He is 24 years old, and kinda involved with some sort of gang thing, I don’t know. He is a very busy man, he owns the bar. He let me be his bartender here. I love Brennan, at times he acts like he couldn’t care less about me. I can’t say much about him, he keeps to himself. I don’t know why he chose me to be his girlfriend, when he so handsome, he can get any girl without even looking at them.
My names Cameron, I’m 20 years old. I have black hair and green eyes. I get my eyes from my dad, and hair from mom. I had a brother, Ian. My parents and big brother died when I was 7 years old.
I was sitting on the couch with my mom. She was pregnant with my little sister. Ian was 14 and I was 7. My dad had been gone for about a couple weeks. ‘Business’ he said. He’d always be gone, but always would be there when I needed him, too.
My brother was always there, no matter what. I loved him so much. He was my best friend. He would play dolls with me, have pillow fights, and be there when I cried. I remembered him so clearly, like he could be standing right next to me.
The front door slides open. It’s my father.
‘Daddy!!’ I yell.
My mother jumps at my scream, so did Ian.
‘Hey, sweetheart’ my father said.
My mom attempts to get up, but her round belly weighs her down. I see Ian go over to help her by picking her up and gently setting her feet back down on the floor.
My father set me down on the floor. I had a giddy smile on my face, I must’ve looked crazy because of the way my brother looked at me.
My father makes his way over to my mom. He smiles really wide at her, she smiles back.
‘I’ve missed you, Letty.’ he said.
‘Me too...’ she said. You could tell my mom was really happy. Her whole face was read, she looked like a tomato.
My dad leaned down and started kissing my mom. It wasn’t a hungry, lustful kiss. It was a slow passionate kiss that they could never forget.
‘Get a room!!’ my brother yelled.
My dad pulled away and chuckled, that deep, room shaking, chuckle. The hairs on the back of my moms neck stood up from embarrassment.
The door slams open. There were three or four men running in our house.
I was so scared. Every part of my body was shaking. Moms, too.
Dad pulls out a gun but before he could shoot, BANG!!
My dad falls lifeless to the ground. A pool of blood surrounding his body.
My mom falls to the ground next to him, to see if he’s okay.
She looks up shaky. My father was dead.
My brother pulls out a gun, at 14! I know, crazy right?!
Ian shoots one of the men, but before he could shoot the others, BANG!!
My brother goes down with a hole in his shoulder.
I start crying and sink down to the floor, until my brother pulls me and my mom into their bedroom. The men are outside getting some sort of stuff.
‘Be silent, no matter what, okay?’
‘Ian-’ my mom gets interrupted by Ian.
‘Mom, I’ll be okay, just please?’
‘Okay...’ she says
He runs downstairs. Then I hear that deafening sound again. My brother, he can’t be... But he is...
Next thing I’m being pushed in the closet and being told to ‘hide’.
I obey my mothers orders.
I see two men enter the room, and smirk when they see my mother. They rush towards her and ties her hands up with rope. I don’t want to watch this, I want to cry and scream, but I can’t...
I hear my mothers screams, then she falls on her stomach, then I think ‘No, my baby sister!!’ Then a bullet shell fall to the floor.
My mother was raped and beaten senseless, then shot. The one I loved from day one....gone....
My whole family....gone....
****END OF FLASHBACK****
Enough with bringing my horrific past up. Let’s get ready for tonight’s services.
XXXXXDDDD My very first story, The Gang Leader’s Princess. I know it’s short but will get longer as it goes along.
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