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Blue Betrayal

By theyellowduckling All Rights Reserved ©

Fantasy / Romance

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Max doesn’t know why he got here… to this blood sucking place. He became prey to Marisa Caldwell, a royal, a princess, a head figure of her kind. Time passed and they became closer and closer. Slowly… Marisa began to fall for this human boy. But the only thing Max ever had in mind was how to get out of this place. Secretly Max organized a plan to save himself and the humans trapped in there. To do this he feigned to love Marisa back. But were all these really just an act? Or maybe they were real?

Chapter 1

I ran fast, as fast as I could, I stumbled on the tree roots, but continued running. Leaves kept brushing my face. But no matter how fast I ran, they ran much quicker than me. I looked back, and when I looked back front again, two were standing there, right in front of me, and another two at my back. I had nowhere to go now, I was surrounded. Under the blue moonlight, they looked almost all the same. But, there was one. The tallest one, with shiny black hair, spiky black leather jacket, and bright, crimson red eyes. Those eyes, they shined under the moonlight. I was just… too stunned to move. He leaned forward to me and pulled my neck toward him. He “kissed” me on the neck, and I think his teeth went right into my vein. He did it with unexpected gentleness. All of a sudden all my body relaxed and I fell to the ground.


I waked up in a dark, little square room. The only light source was coming from the little square window high above. I was laying on a 19th century hospital style bed, and a little wooden nightstand was beside it with a set of clothes laid on it. To the right, there was a metal door that looked pretty steady and heavy. I pulled myself up and suddenly realized I was naked but extra clean. My hand reached up to my chest, the necklace, it was not there. I quickly got down from bed and began to search the room, the dim moonlight did no help. Suddenly, the metal door swung open with a big slam. I turned to look toward the door, and saw him with his other fellow mates, guards, I should say. His clothes were different than that night, they were much more formal. He wore a long black tail tuxedo. But his eyes were still glowing bright red, especially in this dark, misty room. He walked in, his shining black oxford shoes led great taps on the wooden floor. The dim light hit his face, and I suddenly realized that he was… really handsome. I had to admit it. The type of popular, hot, girls- chasing guy you would meet in some rich high schools. If I was a girl I would very likely fall for him as well.

“Get him dressed” said the red-eye guy. And the two guards came and started to “dress” me in the most brutal way. I tried to break free but they just hold too strong. After a few minutes I was dressed… quite well actually. White shirt, black pants and dress shoes. They put some hair gel on my hair and combed it into a gentleman hairstyle. “Where is here?” I finally burst out and asked, I got no reply. I was pushed out the room, I almost tripped, each of the guards hold each of my arms, they hold me strongly. They led me to a long, long pass way, with many more metal doors at the left. There were ominous smell surrounding the hallway. Nothing good will happen, I have to find a way to get out of this place, I told myself.

We then came to a huge garden, there was no one. I thought this was a good chance, probably my only. I trusted in my fighting skills. I always won at fighting in my school and on the streets, I could even go one to five. By this time, the guards grip already eased since I was quite cooperative. I quickly pulled my arms away from their hands and with my fingers poked one of the guard in the eye. He screamed and cover his aching eye with his hands and fell to the ground. The other guard grabbed my neck from my back and I did a back flip, and kicked him on the head. He lowered a bit, but it did literally no harm. The red-eye guy at the front had moved, and now he was grabbing me by the neck.

He lifted me up, I choked, I struggled for some oxygen. He stared at me and said “Behave yourself, little homo sapien.” And threw me down the ground. “Go to the healers.” He told the guard that I poked in the eye, still on the floor in pain. “Yes sir.” he replied, and left for the opposite direction. “Shackle him.” the red-eye guy ordered the other guard. The guard pulled out some heavy hand shackles from his pocket and did as he was told. “Sir… I suppose it might be dangerous for Lady Caldwell” said the guard. “Lady Caldwell said she wanted something different, she is a skilled girl, she can handle it very well.” he answered back and the guard just shut up. I didn’t understand anything they were saying. It? Lady Caldwell? We continued, to wherever they were going to take me to. Now, the guard grabbed me tighter that it hurt.

Now there was an enormous palace in front of me, with many black suit guards surrounding it. We entered and there were more guards. We climbed up some stairs, and went through hallways and hallways and stairs, and hallways again. Finally, we stopped in front of a cherry wood door. The red-eye guy knocked on it politely. “Lady Caldwell…” the voice inside didn’t let the red-eye guy to finish, “Just bring it in Hale, I waited for three days already! I’m starving!” What? So am I it? So I’m food? I felt nervousness and scare rising up in my body. “Yes, your highness.” The red-eye guy replied, I mean, Hale replied. Hale opened the door and the guard pushed me in. It was an enormous, elegant, baroque room. A woman was by the window, looking out at the moon, with her back facing us. She had long silky blond hair and wore a long, loose, semi-transparent white dress. She turned.


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