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What Makes An Army
Chapter One- Evil Born
Point of View- Phil
The year: 2014
The date: 1st February
The location: Greenock College, Greenock, Scotland
The temperature: Cold (isn’t it always in Scotland)?
It was the usual temperature in Scotland (probably minus figures). My plan was about to commence.
Now I must explain who I am for you. I’m Phil Robinson. I’m at this college on business. But I’m not a school inspector. Or a taxi driver. Or a parent (yet). No- I’m a hypnotist. Not trained, not approved, self taught, hypnotist… probably. I’ve not actually tried it yet, but I found a course online teaching me. Only cost £100. Anyway…
The reason I’m here is because I have an ultimate target, a goal. She doesn’t study here, but she’s visiting here. So my first target is the person she’s visiting- her pen pal. Then, running as fast as her legs would go, she arrived. Her name? Jodi ‘Scout’ Allen. I followed her in, then tapped her on the shoulder.
Phil: ‘Can you tell me where Hannah Cummings is?’
Jodi: ‘Dunno- I’m meeting her for the first time today. Who are you anyway?’
Phil: ‘I’m an old friend of hers. My name’s Phil Robinson. Can I have a word a moment?’
Jodi: ‘Sure. I’m Jodi Allen by the way.’
Phil: ‘Thanks.’ I then took her to one side, and immediately handcuffed her to a rail.
Jodi: ‘What are you doing?’
Phil: ‘Short or long answer required? I have both.’
Phil: ‘Hypnotising you.’
Jodi: ‘Ok, rewind, why?’
Phil: ‘You want the long answer now? Geez- teenagers these days, can never make their minds up. Fine- I want Hannah under my control. And I need someone to help me do it. So that’s where you come in- I heard from a friend of mine that you are spending time with Hannah. So you can get Hannah for me, and I get 2 slaves instead of 1. Explanation enough? Or you want me to text you.'.
Jodi: ‘Please- I’ll do that for you, just let me go, ok?’
Phil: ‘Fine- you have 48 hours. You will wear this camera tie so I know exactly what’s going on. If you even try to tell her, or you don’t do it, or try to run away, the tie will tell me and a siren will start wailing, knocking you out.’
Jodi: ‘Fine- just untie me you freak.’ I then untied her.
Phil: ‘Clock’s ticking.’
Jodi: ‘I know.’ Jodi then left, and I kept an eye on her and Hannah. After the first 24 hours, nothing seemed to be happening. So as Jodi left for the day, I took her to one side. ’24 hours left- I’ll get there.’
Phil: ‘I’ve decided to extend the time limit.’
Jodi: ‘Really? That's helpful- might take another day or two. She's well strong.'
Phil: ‘Yes- you’ll have forever to repay me.’ I then handcuffed her to the post again. ‘This time it’s not a threat.’
Jodi: ‘I don’t have to look.’
Phil: ‘Once it’s started, you won’t be able to look away. Now watch the pretty coin of gold, and you will do as you are told. You will obey only me.’ Jodi couldn’t look away, no matter how much she tried to resist. ‘Good girl- you’re there now. Now keep your focus. When I click my fingers, you will be in a hypnotic trance, unable to resist my word.’ I then clicked my fingers and it worked- she was in an entranced state.
‘Now Jodi, listen to my words, read them well. I will shortly click my fingers for a second time. You will then awaken. But your heart will be tainted and dark- you will no longer be bound to the laws of this world. You will be deep under my spell, determined to follow my every word. You are stronger than you would think, but your strength along with your heart and mind are now mine.’ I then clicked my fingers a second time, and Jodi awakened, deep under my spell.
Jodi: 'How do I serve?'
Phil: ‘Jodi, I will drive you home, and you will pack your bags, before leaving. You will then get back in my car, and you will move in to our base of operations. You refer to me now as your master.’
Jodi: ‘I will obey master.’
Phil: ‘Good girl Jodi. Let’s go.’ Jodi then got in my car, and we left for her house. When we got there, I briefed her again. ‘Jodi, you will go and pack all of your belongings into suitcases. If anybody asks, you’re moving, you tell them nothing else. Once everything is packed up, you come with me to the base.’
Jodi: ‘Yes master.’ Jodi then got out of the car, and walked to the front door at a quick and determined pace. When the door was opened for her, she walked straight through the woman at the door, and walked straight upstairs. She then re-emerged about 5 minutes later, the woman shouting at her. She bunged the two suitcases into the back of the car, and then got back into the car, before leaving with me.
We drove south, for nearly 7 hours. When we got there, I opened the door, and she walked straight in, surprising Sean.
Now I must introduce you to Sean and Mollie. Sean's a great guy... if you ignore the alcohol, the casual drugs, and the constant calls after he's been arrested for public disorder.
As for Mollie, she's a real star. Organised and patient, two things me and Sean lack. She wasn't too happy about my plan, but I... talked her round.
Sean: ‘Yo Phil, that’s not Hannah. What’s going on?’
Phil: ‘Slight hitch in the plan- this is the one I hired to get her. Didn’t co-operate.’
Sean: ‘Plan still on?’
Phil: ‘Advance the plan as agreed.’
Sean: ‘Gotcha man. What about the girl?’
Phil: ‘I’ll deal with her for now. Her name’s Jodi. Actually, could you set up the Cyber lab?’
Sean: ‘Sure man.’ Sean then went up the stairs to set up the Cyber lab. A few minutes later, he called from upstairs. ‘All set up lad.'
Phil: ‘Jodi, come with me.’ Jodi then followed me up the stairs to the Cyber lab, where I took her hair down, and lay her down on a bed. ‘Now relax Jodi- the conversion will shortly take place. When you are awakened, you will remember little, just what you need.’
I injected Jodi with an anaesthetic, and the bed that Jodi was on was then wheeled under the machine, which was long, cylindrical, and very, very hot. Me and Sean followed that up by going down, where we met up with Mollie.
Mollie: ‘So you’ve got the messenger.’
Phil: ‘Yeah- I do.’
Mollie: ‘Bet when you have Hannah, she’ll fall in love with you.’
Phil: ‘She won’t.’ We were then interrupted by a muffled screech from upstairs. ‘That’ll be the mind-wiping taking effect. Can’t have everything in life- mind-wiping is painful.’
Mollie: ‘I’ll bet it is. Thanks for not doing it to me.’
Phil: ‘Why would I- you know things I need.’
Mollie: ‘So how long does the mind-wiping take?’ Another screech.
Phil: ‘With the calculations from myself and Donna, approximately 3 hours.’
Mollie: ‘She’s going to spend 3 hours screeching?’
Phil: ‘No- after about an hour, she’ll basically be comatose. Unable to feel her every memory being deleted, her entire life being rewritten. She'll forget how to feel it. Of course, that will be given back to her after the conversion, that's something I can't change.’
Mollie: ‘So how do we get Hannah?’
Phil: ‘We may need reinforcements. Mollie, have you still got Lydia Mckinna’s number?’
Mollie: ‘No, but I have Freja’s.’
Phil: ‘Could you get in contact with her? We could do with them.’
Mollie: ‘Of course. Ask them to come straight away?’
Phil: ‘Yeah. Tell them it’s urgent.’
Mollie: ‘You remember to take out her bobble?’
Phil: ‘Yep.’ I then threw it to Mollie.
Mollie: When she comes back down, introduce me, and I’ll tie her hair back.′
Sean: ‘Why are you two working together anyway?’
Mollie: ‘He persuaded me that his vision’s good.’
Phil: ‘My skill helped.’
Sean: ‘You mean’
Phil: ‘You guessed it.’
Sean: ‘All you need now is a chick who believes like you.’
Mollie: ‘Why not Hannah?’
Phil: ‘It wouldn’t be real, would it?’
Mollie: ‘Make it real.’ About 2½ hours later, the conversion was complete, so we extracted the bed from the machine. Jodi was just lay there, still and unconscious, but with a scowl on her face. ‘So what happens now?’
Phil: ‘We leave her about an hour for everything to settle down. Then we can wake her up anytime.’ Just then, there was a knock on the door. ‘That’ll be Lydia and Freja.’ Mollie then opened the door, and Lydia and Freja came in. Freja had her medium-length brunette hair tied up in a ponytail with a red hairband on, and Lydia had her long, red hair put up in an arch-style.
Lydia: ‘What’s up Mollie?’
Mollie: ‘I need to show you something.’
Freja: ‘Sure.’ When Lydia and Freja came into the room, the door was slammed behind them, and Mollie smiled evilly, before tying their hands and feet together with rope.
Lydia: ‘Phil, what’s going on? Not seen you in ages.’
Phil: ‘You want’
Mollie: ‘Just get on with it- sooner it's started, sooner it's done.'
Phil: ‘Good point. Lydia, Freja, watch the pretty coin of gold, and you will do as you are told. You will obey only me. Keep watching the coin. You are being hypnotised, falling under my spell. When I click my fingers, you will both be in an entranced state, where only my voice is recognisable. My voice is the law though.’ I then clicked my fingers, and they both fell asleep.
I then walked over to in between them, and knelt down. ‘Now when you wake up girls, you will be obeying me- you will be completely at my command. I will be your master, and you will do as you are told. Now awaken, and start obeying.’ I then clicked my fingers again, and they woke up. Freja’s bright blue eyes were now cloudy, and Lydia had a vacant expression on her face.
Mollie: ‘Looks like a good job there. Put them in straight away?’
Phil: ‘No- machine needs a while to cool down. I’d say give it about half an hour.’ Shortly afterwards, I woke Jodi up.
Phil: ‘That’s right Jodi. Welcome to the club. Now you remember your mission?’
Jodi: ‘Yes master- capture Hannah Cummings. She will be converted.’
Phil: ‘Good girl. Now sit in that chair.’ Jodi then sat down, and Mollie tied her hair back as I prepared Lydia for the machine, letting her hair down. ‘Lydia, follow me.’ Lydia then did that, looking empty and lost. When we got up there, I lay her down in the bed, and then put her in for conversion.
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