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Ten Revolutions - Part One

By Loren Marie Story All Rights Reserved ©

Drama / Scifi


Anil Parivartta had been the son of a great hero. During World War III, called 'The Last War,' by the survivors, his father had fought the ruthless mercenary gangs called 'packs' that roamed the underground stealing and killing as they pleased. Eventually the hero was killed by a pack called The Venom of God, so Anil swore himself to their rival pack, who called themselves The Revolutionists, in the hopes of avenging his father. The Revolutionists, with their twisted rituals and odd practices, molded Anil into a warrior, just as Anil had planned. But what he had not counted on was their leader's personal interest in him. They called him the Princessless Prince. With only one eye, scars that never fully healed and superhuman abilities such as enhanced strength and speed, Anil became ensnared by this enigmatic man, and began to uncover his origins and the source of his power. Long ago his heart had been stolen by a witch, leaving him with all the power he could ever desire but the price of never being able to love. Anil eventually is faced with the decision whether to aid him in his quest for revenge against the witch or destroy him as his father would have wished.


“Humble yourselves therefore under the mighty hand of God, that he may exalt you in due time.”

Peter 1:6

Once upon a time, a Prince and a Princess fell in love at the edge of the world. In a tiny wooden boat they sailed towards their impending doom where the waters of the oceans fell off the land and into the unknown. They held each other, desperately clinging to every moment they had left and cursing the fates who had willed their perfect existence into oblivion. Yet there was no regret in their gazes. They simply loved, with a perfect love that would last for all time.

The Princess rested her head on the Prince’s shoulder, marveling at every aspect of her lover. His beautiful voice and how it comforted her in darkness, his strong arms and how they would never fail to lift her up, and his calming hands that abolished all her fears. But the fear of death and nonexistence is the strongest fear of all, and it planted the smallest seed of doubt in her heart.

“Shall we always be together, from this life onward?” the Prince asked of her. Like a strangling vine the doubt inside her grew as she looked into his eyes. A genteel smile of knowing defeat passed over her perfectly red lips — her flawless touch graced his cheek.

“I do not think so,” she answered with a sigh, “For I do not believe you truly love me.”

Shocked to hear such a lie pass from his lady’s lips, the Prince stared at her in disbelief, awaiting an explanation. She turned from him as the ideal blush in her face vanished.

“I have slain your enemies. I have devoted my life to your every whim. I have given you all that I ever was and have promised you everything I ever will be. What more must I do to prove that our love is true?”

“You only love the idea of me,” she continued, “And God would never allow a false love such as this to exist in his heaven. We were cursed from the moment we allowed our own selfish desires to see what we wanted to see in one another, and there is nothing for it.”

The Prince looked into the water. He could think of nothing to say.

“Did you really believe that there was such a thing as true love?” she asked. Her radiant skin slowly faded to an ashen grey and as the light left her, she seemed to grow older and uglier.

“Obviously not,” he said bitterly. His hands quietly transformed into claws and his teeth became fangs. “For you do not love me.”

The Princess, slightly hurt yet doing her best to remain aloof, sighed innocently, “Oh? And what makes you say that?”

Without pause, a Beast, now standing where the Prince had been, drew its sword. A flash and it held the rapier to her throat, encircling it with its spare claw. A fire lit its eyes as the lust for the kill enveloped it — its temperate, majestic manner was replaced by a primal bloodlust. The Princess softly began to weep.

“No… please don’t…!” she cried. Her hands quaked in fear as the make-up around her eyes ran black rivers down her face. Her melodious voice now began to crackle and wail, screaming frantically. Her crown was jostled off her head and it fell with a clang and a splash into the water. She was no longer a princess, but a hideous witch.

A long silence followed as the boat continued to creep towards its doom. Finally, the Beast sheathed its sword and let go, turning its back to her and to the waters already passed. The Witch collapsed in a wrinkled heap on the floor, gasping for air.

“…Because you believed just now that I was going to kill you,” the Beast at last replied. “You believed that I was capable of such a thing. Therefore, my lady, what you say is true. You will forever see me as nothing but a Beast, and I will always dream of the Princess that does not exist from this life onward.”

Still shivering, the Witch stood up and held the Beast from behind, wrapping her arms around its torso. She buried her face between its shoulder blades and whispered, “I’m so, so sorry. If only we had not let the world’s fear into our hearts. If only we had listened to what we knew was right. Then perhaps… things would have been different.”

“Yes…,” it whispered in return. “…Perhaps.”

The roar of the water became louder and louder until it was nearly deafening. Then the two shared their first and last kiss as the darkness of death swallowed them forever.Start writing here ...
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