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She stood at the foot of her mother’s bed.
Light from clay lamps flickered, casting trembling shadows.
Breezes, heavy with incense, stirred linen drapes.
Seven women, the Hathors, stood around the bed hunched over the old woman. She lay still, wheezing, taking shallow breaths. Wisps of white hair, tangled and brushed away from her forehead, framed her aged face. In outstretched hands, she grasped coverings.
They stood in silence transmitting words and images with thoughts.
Gasping, the old woman called out, her voice ragged, “Batresh.”
The Hathors acted quickly. The technology in the jewelry they wore, the medallions and stones that hung from their foreheads activated, casting light towards the old woman. They closed their eyes and chanted low-pitched words from the old language. Acolytes behind them shook sistrums, accompanying the chant with metallic shimmering.
Batresh witnessed this ritual once before. Like then, her head swam. The walls melted, swirling around her. Closing her eyes, she held onto the bedpost. Soot from incense burned her nostrils. Her heart pounded.
Slowly, incrementally, as if waking from a dream, the dizziness diminished. She regained her footing and tried to stand. The chanting stopped. Opening her eyes, she saw the Hathors standing back from the bed, staring at the lifeless body of the old woman.
The transfer was complete, her Ka sent to another time, to another place.
The Matriarch was dead.
Jasmine Chow: As I read this story, I was reminded some what of Terry Pratchett, especially some descriptions of politics and economics. The sci-fic setting is quite intriguing. Writing style is quite lovely and grew on me slowly. I was also slightly reminded of Mark Twain, especially his book A Connecticut Ya...
Dru83: This is a great story, mainly because of the uniqueness and variety of the characters. There's also several mini story lines occurring underneath the main plot. Some of the plot twists towards the end are unexpected and twist at your heart strings a bit. The punctuation and grammar could use some...
summerstone: Seriously this is one of the best books I've ever read. The plot is intriguing, I love the narrative style. Its very descriptive and unique, with minimal cliches. It makes for a great read and the sequels are amazing. Totally worth reading. ^^ That's me trying to be professional. But in all hones...
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ga1984: I really enjoyed it! Characters were deep and plot was pretty complex. A bit on the violent side but it doesnt detract from the story. Very dark but situations make sense. Ends kinda abruptly and later chapters will need some editing work. I'm assuming there's more in the works?
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