This novel is limited to 100 free copies due to its part in Inkitt’s Novel Contest.
She stood at the foot of her mother’s bed.
Light from clay lamps flickered, casting trembling shadows.
Breezes, heavy with incense, stirred linen drapes.
Seven women, the Hathors, stood around the bed hunched over the old woman. She lay still, wheezing, taking shallow breaths. Wisps of white hair, tangled and brushed away from her forehead, framed her aged face. In outstretched hands, she grasped coverings.
They stood in silence transmitting words and images with thoughts.
Gasping, the old woman called out, her voice ragged, “Batresh.”
The Hathors acted quickly. The technology in the jewelry they wore, the medallions and stones that hung from their foreheads activated, casting light towards the old woman. They closed their eyes and chanted low-pitched words from the old language. Acolytes behind them shook sistrums, accompanying the chant with metallic shimmering.
Batresh witnessed this ritual once before. Like then, her head swam. The walls melted, swirling around her. Closing her eyes, she held onto the bedpost. Soot from incense burned her nostrils. Her heart pounded.
Slowly, incrementally, as if waking from a dream, the dizziness diminished. She regained her footing and tried to stand. The chanting stopped. Opening her eyes, she saw the Hathors standing back from the bed, staring at the lifeless body of the old woman.
The transfer was complete, her Ka sent to another time, to another place.
The Matriarch was dead.
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