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Mary's Hellpark

By felicitristesse All Rights Reserved ©

Action / Thriller

I want to decapitate a doll

If this is their idea of an amusement park, I have no idea how they picture hell. I have a super strong urge to punch someone in the face right now and I am very sure that it is not what an amusement park is supposed to make anyone feel.


I mean come on. I’m just five minutes into this ridiculous amusement park. In those five minutes, I am already strapped to this super uncomfortable, weird technology chair. To boot, I have to listen to a creepy and glowing baby doll talk in a kid’s voice in a dimly lit room.


I am going to die.


“Welcome to Mary’s Amusement Park!” The doll hangs down from the high ceiling, its hands and feet tied with nylon strings. “I am Mary, and I will be your guide for your adventure!” It points to itself, its smile spreads wider—too wide! I grimace simply from looking at it. That smile literally tears her cheek! I know that I am not the only one that thinks that the doll is creepy because I definitely hear gasps from other chairs. Still thinking this is some kind of Disneyland, people?


“Today, you chosen people will start a new adventure. What kind of adventure? You have to figure it out by yourself! But I can assure you, it’ll be very, very fun.” The doll flies as it cackles, her childish robotic voice reverberates around the room. 'Fun', it said. As if.


“There are one hundred floors in total to clear,” the doll continues, “you guys will attempt to clear all those hundred floors in a party of four. Remember, if one person of the party clears the floor, that party is free to advance to the next level, but not the rest. Therefore, make sure you find reliable teammates unless you want to be trapped here forever!”


…One hundred fucking floors?


Shouts of protests and gasps of surprise quickly spread across the room. I am so tempted to follow, just purely out of my instinct to complain, but I take a deep breath before leaning back on the chair, regaining my composure. I shall not be provoked this easily.


This must be some kind of ridiculous joke that is meant to scare people here. But this is an amusement park, not a haunted house, right? Or haunted tower, whatever. Is this some kind of thriller themed amusement park?

Seems that those lots of people are as clueless as I am, since they protest heavily. The room is quickly filled by complaining chatters and incredulous shouts. Well, anyone will react like that if they are threatened to be trapped forever. Except anyone smart enough to see through that, of course.


The doll does not seem to heed the protests and continue with its explanation. Its smile remains completely unchanged, even when one of the participants take the threat too seriously that it spouts profanities. Without a care, it continues to explain. “If you come here with friends, you can add their name to your locator so you can locate them easily. If you want to form a party with them, just go to the party mode and bump your locator with theirs. Careful, though, this is irreversible, and you’ll be stuck with them unless they can’t continue playing!”


“Locator?” I look around and catch sight of something circling my wrist. This must be the locator that the doll speaks of. Of course, I enter the name ‘Alisa McReyna’, which is the name of my closest friend that drags me here with her just because she claims to want some quality time to spend with me.


Yeah, going to this creepy amusement park is definitely quality time.


After the name is inputted, a hologram map pops out and two dots appear there, one is labeled with ‘Kaliska’, my own name, and another is labeled ‘Alisa McReyna’. Fortunately, it isn’t too far. Though, I can't do anything about it now, as my hands are still strapped to the armrest of the chair.


... Come to think of it, this chair looks so fancy. It looks like something you'd see on the futuristic movies. How do I escape this kind of stuff?


...Yanking wrist free from straps: Attempt 1 failed.


Of course it is. Why did I think it'd be easy? I smile incredulously in my own stupidity and look up.


... Shit.


As if knowing that I just tried to escape, the doll looks at me with its golden eyes, the smile widening so much it makes my heart skip a beat. My palms are immediately sweating, and I just stare at the doll like an idiot, gaping like fish out of the water.


The doll continues and finally takes its eye off me, allowing me a room to breathe. My hands are still shaking! This is way too much to be just an amusement park. I want to go home like, right now. I am usually not this much of a scaredy-cat, but this is really making me uncomfortable.


“Challenges may or may not differ in every level. These challenges are a race against time, so they should not be too hard!" The doll keeps on blabbing, it's totally not helping my heart that is currently trying to recover. "Well, too much explanation will make you all go to sleep, therefore, let’s just get to it!"


... Please don't tell me we are supposed to kill each other now like in Hunger Games. I won't be surprised if that fucked up doll tells me to do so.


"To pass this level, please at least get one person for your party and walk towards the leveling up area!" Oh, thank the gods. "You can find the leveling up area by looking at your locator. The place marked with a black triangle is the area! Then, I bid you luck and let me see you in the upper levels!”


The ceiling opens to drag the doll out our sight and closes again, leaving us in a room full of people complaining and crying. Well, at least it disappears. I really can’t handle looking at her creepy smile anymore.


Click! Not long after that, the straps are unlocked and I am able to move my wrists. The locator stays on my left wrist, though. Sighing, I look at the hologram map and walk towards Alisa’s direction, bumping into some people on the way. I feel claustrophobic now… so many people… I hate people.


I try to detach myself from the chaotic buzz of complaints and cries all around me, but it's not working. I am seriously going to punch Alisa in the face for taking me to this kind of place. Not fun at all, friend—


“KAAAALISKAAAAA!!!”


A shout that is more like a hysterical high-pitched scream can be heard, and immediately most people around me put their hands on their ears. I definitely know whose voice is that, but now I am almost too embarrassed to admit that I know.


Before I know it, someone already tackles me, diving headfirst to my chest area. My shirt quickly becomes wet because the person is crying her eyes out on my shirt. There can only be one person to do so.


“Alisa, stop.”


She cries harder, pressing closer. I cannot breathe— “Alisaaaa,” I protest, trying to push her away, but she’s not having any of it. She continues to cry to my chest like my sweater is her personal handkerchief. Be patient is what I want to do, but—


WHACK!


I hit her head with my fist, pretty hard to get her out of her crying spell but not too hard to make her faint.


“OWW!” She howls in pain, holding her head with both of her hands pressed against the spot. “That’s mean! I am desperately scared here and you are whacking me?!”


“You are suffocating me and it’s you who dragged me here,” I put my hands on my hips, lowering my head to stare right through her eyes in a judgmental manner. “I should be the one complaining now, but because I am such a kind-hearted person..." Feel free to puke now, people. "I will not complain much if you have a valid reason why you are taking me to such a horrible place.”


“I have no idea that it is different than a normal amusement park,” Alisa pouts as she played with her short hair. “I just get the tickets from a friend who doesn’t want it, and I think it’s good to go with you since you are my best friend and it’s been a while since we can hang out because I spend too much time on my boyfriend and—“


“Okay stop.” I raise my hand. She’ll seriously derail too far if I don’t stop her, and I don’t want to hear her fangirl about her own boyfriend right now. “Now this thing is really fucked up. I really don’t like this. Is there any way we can exit? It’ll be ridiculous if we can’t.”


“I want to think we can, but I have no idea how. I have fiddled with the locator for a while, but I can’t seem to find an emergency exit.” Alisa lets out a deep sigh. “I’m scared, Kaliska.”


I want to say that I should be the one who's scared, but Alisa has always been a scaredy-cat, so she must be even more scared than I am. As pissed as I am, I don't want her to be seriously hurt by my words. She's the only person who can handle my sharp words after all.


"Alright, since we can't find any exit for the time being, let's just try to follow the doll's instructions. Let's see if we can find a staff later in the game. If we find the staff, we can ask them how to get out. Alright?"


Alisa nods a little, swallowing a sob.


"Okay, first things first, let's form a party. Hold out your locator and touch it with mine."


Alisa does as instructed and the locator ding-ed. I check the party list and find Alisa's name there. "Done," I say curtly before activating the hologram map. "It seems that it's over there. Hold my hand. You might get lost."


Alisa stays quiet for a while, hesitance obvious in her dark blue eyes. I know why.


"This won't be a false hope, Alisa," I assure her. "Besides, it is weird that you are afraid of me thinking weird things by holding hands when you are tackling me on the boobs earlier."


Alisa smiles sheepishly. "I'm sorry. I was panicking earlier."


"It's fine. I did tell you, right? I don't want anything to change between us. I am bisexual and I like you, but that doesn't mean I don't know that you don't like me in that way. You have a boyfriend, after all."


"... Sorry, Kaliska."


I shake my head. "It's okay. Let's just go."


The warmth of her hand feels pleasant, but I am not going to say anything.

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