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The Girl Reborn
Sunlight blazed through the curtains, scorching my face like red, hot hellfire.
“Morning, sunshine.” A text message flashed on my smartphone, “today everything changes.”
My brain was dirt tired, beaten by the previous night’s crazed gaming till the wee hours of the early morning. I pushed myself off the couch and dragged my phone with me, wishing I had just one more hour of sleep. The message came from Shinar, a skilled content creator I met a few months ago on Reborn – the world’s largest virtual reality and the root of my sick affliction. I was a helpless addict, unable to resist the drug. I needed it, and it needed me.
“Are you coming?” Shinar beeped again.
“Ja, one moment.” I texted him.
The VR projected the likeliness of the user for security reasons. Anonymity was strictly forbidden, and if anyone got caught attempting to fake a profile, they were instantly banned. Sometimes worse, although in a virtual world, it made me wonder what “worse” could even mean. Me? I was extremely vain. I had to make sure I looked like an angel before entering the world. It was hard to say how long your next stay would be. Things went by so fast in Reborn, that one day there, could be two in the real world. There was always so much to do. Anything I dreamed of, I could create. It was impossible to stay away.
“Combing that long blonde hair, huh?” Shinar’s intuition sometimes disturbed me.
“Maybe.” I teased, placing the brush aside and taking a good look in the mirror with a deep, drawn out sigh.
I was ready to dive in the VR, but in that moment, everything stood still. I noticed my beautiful face was slowly starting to look increasingly drained. It looked like I hadn’t slept in days, or worse, weeks. The blue shimmer in my eyes started to lose its color, like a vampire lacking blood. It didn’t matter, Reborn was calling my name. There may have been a time I was free; a time when I would go out, enjoy life and all its spoils, even in the most hedonistic ways – but those times were gone. All that remained was a ghost in the shell of a girl who once knew what she was destined to do.
The VR goggles sat upside down on the trashed living room floor. I threw them off last night in rage confused by what was real and what wasn’t. That was the issue with VR. It made you question certain things your mind wasn’t ready to accept. My fingers gently trickled at the sides of the goggles with faded breath, making me wet between the legs. I knew that every time I went in, it was possible I wouldn’t see the light of day again and yet, I didn’t care.
I wanted it and I needed it. Don’t tell me otherwise.
The whole world twisted to darkness the moment I placed the goggles over my eyes and my body was paralyzed, forced not to act on the inputs of my brain circuits connected to the virtual realm. If I was ready to leave, I could only do that by disconnecting inside the VR.
“Please enter your username and password.” The login screen showed up.
‘Nyxe.’ I typed in the alternate spelling of my name and used ‘BlueEyes92xR’ for the password, waving my virtual hand across the blue, neon-lit interface.
“Login check confirmed. Welcome to Reborn.” The computer’s voice spoke with hidden allure, letting me know that was it. Any chance I had of going back? Nothing more than a fool’s hope.
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