SunshyneCF

City of the Dead

I was born with Cystic Fibrosis and I am a teenager, I have always like to read and write and I hope that you guys will enjoy my stories! :)

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Great Overall

Overall, a great story. My only confusion was the sudden input of characters. I could've missed that from the beginning. Books with magic isn't really my thing, so I had some confusion with what was going on, but I'm sure that others who like this genre would like this book very much. Everything else was great, keep up the good work!

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Great So Far

So far, a great novel. A few grammar mistakes were made here and there, but those can be fixed easily. Keep up the good work!

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Awesome Story!

Great story, really interesting! One trouble was pronouncing some of the names as they were foreign, but that's alright! Grammar is nice, punctuation is good. Some more sensory detail would do too, I'm a little unaware where this story is taking place, like what it looks like. Other than that, great story! Love the back story before too! I would recommend this to people who love comedy as this story was really funny and real life problems as the characters have those too! Great job, keep up the great work!

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A Few Mistakes, Still a Great Story

So far, a great story! Definitely interesting. The only thing I has trouble with was pronouncing some of the words ad understanding where the were at. Some more sensory detail would help fix that. I also saw son grammar mistakes as we'll as punctuation. A few commas and capitalized words were missing, it seemed fast. My suggestion: more sensory details, more commas and fix punctuation, and capitalized words as well a page maybe on how to pronounce some words names. Id also make the chapter way shorter. I still recommended this book to those who like fantasy or twists. Great job!

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