Addison McKenzie

NC

My name is Addison McKenzie, and I aspire to one day become a bestselling author. My hobbies include writing, art, and other similar activities.

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Interesting

I can’t understand where the plot is going yet, but from what little you have written this seems like an intriguing plot. Keep up with the good work.

Sweet Teh

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Needs Editimg

First, let's start with your strengths. I like your creativity and use of magical creatures. You also give the personality of the characters. The world is not clear, although, I would suggest adding more world building, and more explanations,

The idea was intriguing, but it was unbelievable that the main character immediately found the key to the book. I also didn't get the point of the champagne or what was going on in the beginning. It’s a good start, but it needs more editing.

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Sorry I Accidentally Deleted my Review

Kageyama was very out of character. But idk, I don't read ship stories.

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Exciting

The characters are very relatable and the plot is intriguing. I like the idea of where this story is going. I suggest that you describe things more instead of just having dialogue the whole time. Line after line of diaglogue can sometimes get boring for the reader. Be mindful of smaller details. That is what normally attracts a reader. sorry it took me so long to do a review! I finally found time. Thank you for your patience.

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Nice Fantasy

It seems to have a good plot. I like the variation between the fantasy creatures and humans. I think you should tone down the dialogue a bit; there is more dialogue than description. Please describe emotions and surroundings and this world's laws to be more smoothly read. I didn’t read very much, but I will continue to read and leave comments. This is just my overall first impression. If you have any questions feel free to post on my wall.

Sweet Teh

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Interesting

It is a different story. I like the coincidental meeting of Iris and that guy. Also, I like how her best friend and brother got married. You tend to drag out sentences, but that's the only criticism I have.

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Confusing

This is a unique take on Christianity. I am confused about the plot of this book. The story seems to jump into the next part without explanation. The wording and punctuation are often incorrect.

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A Unique Story

Your characters are very relatable and enjoyable. This fast-paced story seems to be going somewhere with the plot. Overall I enjoyed it.

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Quick-paced Story

Nice! A quick paced story that can keep your interest. Could we get a little more explanation of Ethan’s job?

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I like the Modern World and Magic Mix

I like the setting, and your unique take on magic. Some of the paragraphs drag on to long though. Keep up the great work!

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Confused

I am confused on the plot and what is happening with the characters. Good stat though.

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Salt in the Fire

It was hard to review this book considering there was only one chapter. I like how the characters interact with each other, and the writing flows smoothly.

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