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Stories!

Absolutely loved this short and sweet tale, or should I say, tales. I loved how there were two separate and very distinct stories happening simultaneously that complemented each other beautifully. Each serving as a respite from the other.
They may be two very different stories, but they’re written in such a way that there is no room for misunderstanding. You know which story you’re reading each time you’re reading them. I appreciated the clarity that even though they are two very distinct stories, the reason for them is clearly defined in the book as a whole. I just want more of it! I would have loved for some of the scenes to be drawn out further. Don’t rush. They’re both amazing stories that are both heartbreaking and heartwarming at the same time. Well done, author. Bravo!

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Short and Sweet

A short and sweet book. this tale was enchanting and fun to read. While there could have been more development of the characters, the message was clear and it was written pretty well. Delilah's encounters with Jake, Rhys and Alex were all uniquely engaging and contributed well to the picturesque landscape of life on the farm no matter how luxurious it may have been. It is clear this author enjoys painting pictures for her readers and she has done just that. Well done author.

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It has potential

This story as potential! The chapters are short and fairly quick to read.
The story itself is a fun read full of all kinds of crazy twists and turns. Nothing happens as you would expect it to happen.
The chapters read more like diary entries than a fully fleshed out novel, but if you enjoy that style then this book could be a fun read for you.
With some editing and review I think this could be a pretty fun book.
The potential is there!

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Wonderful idea!

I love this idea! Short story prompts are such a great way to keep a writer's creative juices flowing. Highly recommend this to anyone who wants to continue to create and improve their passion as a writer.

I am honored to be the Week 1 winner!
Cheers!!

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BRILLIANTLY CREEPY!

This is a MUST READ!
Holy cow! I was hooked from the second I read the blurb. I read the entire story in one sitting! I just couldn't stop! It was fantastically creepy and felt so real. Your research was PHENOMENAL! Kerri was such a well-developed character that I had absolutely no problem believing that she's the anthropologist she claims to be! The premise was absolutely amazing and it worked so incredibly perfectly in the telling of this tale. I can't even express how blown away I am by this story. BRAVO!

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A Chilling Nightmare

The description of this story had me hooked from the start. I truly enjoyed this writer's ability to leave us on the edge of our seats as he ended each chapter. I instantly wanted to flip to the next chapter to keep reading. Bravo!
There were some issues, but they were minor and easy to overlook because the story as a whole was very captivating. There were some gruesome and super scary horror moments, but they were woven into a storyline that was constructed very well, so they didn't seem too over-the-top, but it's a horror story, so there's plenty of gore for those of you that like that!
It was a truly chilling tale of nightmares and the things that haunt these characters.
Highly recommended reading for those of you that love a good horror story.

And Levi is a cool dude. Probably one of my favorite supporting characters yet!

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Review of Ghost Letters

Ghost Letters is a series of letters written from the perspective of a teen looking at the way she observed her high school crush two years after the fact. Even though they never interacted in any real and tangible way, there was a deep connection that she felt for her crush and imagined that he had felt the same way but neither had acted on what she feels is that shared connection. I am sure many people have experience with unrequited love, or were too shy to act on a mutual crush. If you enjoy such stories, then you may enjoy this one! Well done, author!

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Exquisite!

Wildflowers Sprout on the Battlefields is a beautifully written story that hooks from the first page. That entire first chapter was so captivating and masterfully written. I just wished that there was more to this story. Flashing back to her past helps the reader understand how she came to have such bravery and grit, and I’ll be waiting impatiently for updates so that hopefully this story comes full circle because that first chapter is WHOA! I am hopeful there will be updates so that we can all know how that first chapter came to be. Very well done, author!

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Save Me Too!

Saving Piper is an erotic tale where love is blind and nothing is as it seems. There’s so much packed into this short tale that every single page will make you simply HAVE to know more. I simply love the fact that this story begins with you expecting one thing only to have that all flipped on its head by the end. It’s such a thrilling road trip that most definitely does not go at all how anyone would expect. If you’re a fan of erotic thrillers, this is the story for you.

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Seriously Amazing!

This is such an adorable story of love at first sight. I was worried at first when he said he had a girl waiting for him because I’m not a fan of cheaters, so thank you sincerely, sincerely for allowing your readers to enjoy the love between Lille and Jaxen to be pure. As I’ve said, it is a short story, but the space you gave Jaxen to grieve and the natural flow of their learning each other and loving each other didn’t feel rushed at all. You managed to pack a punch into such a short tale. Well done, author. Excited to read more of your work in the future.

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So Good!

Lovesick promises a romantic thriller where love is blinding. The first chapter is a doozie that will have you hooked and unable to resist turning the page to find out what the heck is going on. At this point, it is unfinished, but I will definitely be watching for the next chapters in this thrilling tale of love gone wrong. While this tale may remind you of stories you’ve read before, Holliefur has a way with words that lures you in and grabs you hook, line, and sinker. Definitely a must read for those that like romantic thrillers.

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Green Exchange Awards 2nd Place Fantasy Genre

Having already read Spirit of Fire, I was super excited to get to read Luna’s backstory. For anyone that hasn’t read Spirit of Fire, you can read this one on its own. The author does a wonderful job of setting up the world for the readers to understand the Shadow Realm and how vastly different it is from Earth. I am a fan of this author. This storyline is original and refreshing and I will definitely be keeping tabs on all future stories! Author, make sure you just give this story another read through and clear up the repetitiveness of some of the descriptions and clear up some of the silly grammatical mistakes and this story is going to be better than it already is. Excited to finish it!!

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Green Exchange Awards 2nd Place Poetry Genre

The Way I See It is a collection of poetry written from the perspective of its creator. The way this writer sees the world is clearly expressed within each poem of this collection. I have always believed that poetry is meant to be a form of expression — an outlet of sorts — for the writer, and this writer has done just that. The Way I See It is that expression and it is a simple, yet enjoyable to read. The rhymes of a few stanzas feels a bit forced at times and can make the word choice feel a bit awkward, but overall it was a good read. Well done, author.

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Green Exchange Awards 2nd Overall Highest Score

Six Underground is a supernatural take on the classic good vs evil, but boy are the lines blurred in this story. I absolutely loved this story (read up through “Tempted”) and cannot wait to dive into the rest of it! This story allows you to really get to know the characters and their quirks before throwing you into the supernatural world going on around them all the time, and I am grateful for that. It is refreshingly well written and hooks you with every “turn of the page.” My only note is to give it another look through to make sure your expressions and phrasing are correct, but there are very, very few of these instances. Well done, author! I cannot wait to finish this story.

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Green Exchange Awards Overall Winner

Inner Woman Vol. 2 is a collection of impactful, insightful, and honest poetry. If you’re a fan of poetry, this is the collection for you. As a reader, I truly appreciated that we were allowed to see inside this writer’s mind; honored to have been given a glimpse at their vulnerability. That is what I look for in truly impactful poetry and this is definitely it. Well done, author.

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MVP round 3

This is a classic boy-meets-girl tale. And in this case, it is meant as a true compliment. It is refreshing to read a story that is age appropriate, easy to understand, clearly written, and just a sweet, sweet story. There are a few plot holes that need to be cleared up, some word choice issues, grammatical mistakes, and some scenes that need to be drawn out more, but with an edit and some expansion, this can be a truly wonderful story. It is already a great, great start that can only get better. This is honestly such a refreshing tale that is perfect for a younger reader. Thank you, author. Very well done.

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MVP Round 2

This is such an interesting and unique take on the classic boy-meets-girl romance. I have never read a story with pieces from the cat’s perspective before. That was different in a way that I can appreciate for its creativity. It was refreshing to get such a removed take on the happenings, yet so invested in their own way. There were times where the story felt a bit slow moving. I think that is partly due to the way you started the whole story. Chapter one was a lot all at once, so I expected it to continue along that line, but it turned light hearted and moved a lot slower, so it was a bit of a shock in the opposite direction. Cute story and well written, though. Good job.

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MVP Round 2

This is quite the adventure, I must say. I loved the fantastic world of elementals that you’ve build here; the new world they’ve created for themselves and the Shadow World they’re fighting to hold at bay. All the characters are well written and easily relatable, even their powers feel natural, so much a part of them that you don’t even questions when one throws fireballs and shoots water. Well done there. Just watch out for your descriptions. Sometimes it can get a little long-winded. The world is built so well that if you tighten up the wordage a bit, your action scenes won’t get lost. On a whole, very well done, author!

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Last Chance - MVP Awards Review

This story will break your heart from page one and I wish I could say it will get better, but the love is there. It is real and tangible between the two men. Everything this couple goes through has you rooting for them the whole time. Their fight is such a real issue that so many couples face and I am so grateful that this story was told. Thank you for writing it. Without giving too much away, I wish things could have turned out differently, but the reality is… well, it’s real. Watch those tense changes. I’d recommend sticking to past tense so that those amazing and natural time jumps can continue to be as well done as they are. Keep up the great work, author! Well done!

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Love this book!


The title is most definitely a brilliantly misleading ploy by this wonderful author. I love a good mystery where nothing is as it seems. From page one, you’ll be hooked and simply need to find out what happens next. Without giving anything away (because you simply HAVE to find out for yourself) just trust me when I say that this tale will make you question everything you thought you knew. I’m a big fan of this author and all her works and this one was no exception. Well done, author! Keep it up!

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Wolf's Lullaby

This story has real potential! Even though the characters are mythical, they feel real and relatable. They have real strengths and weaknesses. The world in Wolf's Lullaby is east to picture and clearly described. There are some grammatical issues that the author needs to work on, but the story itself is a good one that made me want to keep reading to find out what happens next. These characters have their issues and the author does a wonderful job of sucking you into their drama and that's not easy to do. Keep working hard, author! It's a great start!

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Loving it so far!

I only got to read the first 5 chapters and I cannot wait for more! This author certainly did not disappoint. She promised a weird twist on Cinderella and this is definitely the start of something special. I loved everything about it from start to the end of what's published so far! I'll definitely be keeping tabs on this one. Can't wait for more to be released! Well done, author. Bravo!

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Breathe is so good!

I love me a good dystopian tale. This is instantly addicting and very well written. The subtly scary reality that feels so real is something that's hard to achieve when creating a futuristic reality that can still be relatable to the readers. I am grateful that we are immediately immersed into the world and are allowed to discover the nuances of the future reality that Mina and Caleb face each day. Everything is revealed organically and flows so well into the storyline. Readers aren't bogged down by lengthy descriptions. Bravo author. Loved this story from start to finish!

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Love this book!

If it wasn't for the Roadmap Awards I probably wouldn't have read this book. Westerns have never been my cup of tea - or shot of whiskey in this case. BUT! This is why I love these types of contests. I read books I wouldn't pick up on my own and a whole new world opens up. The Willow Rise Six is extraordinary! If you love westerns, give this book a read. It is action packed and full of grit and gristle that will leave you wanting more with each chapter. I absolutely loved how the author ended each chapter with a cliff hanger or a witty bit of writing. Reading the comments below each chapter confirmed what I was feeling: It is like reading a much awaited weekly installment of your favorite story. You can't wait to see what the characters do next. Very well done author! Loved this book!

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Holy Cow!

Twisted Fate is not what I expected at all when I started reading this book. One thing is for sure, the cover does not prepare you for what you'll read, but trust me, you won't want to put it down. Kermit will shatter you and Russel will give you a glimmer of hope. The themes are not for the faint of heart, but if you can handle the adult content (and a shattered heart) then this book is so worth the read. Have tissues handy and maybe a punching bag, too. So well done author. Wow, just wow.

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A work of art

I have to admit that this book took me much longer to read than others here on Inkitt because it is quite the wordy piece of prose, but I am very glad that I did. It reads like the stories of old; back in the Victorian era when the words spun off the page and really made you listen. There is a sense of poetry about this dark and haunting tale. It is not your typical read, that is for sure, but if you give it a chance like I did, you won't be disappointed. Well done author.

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Such a good story!

A Little Taste of Heaven is such a wonderful story of love and heartbreak. I enjoyed this story so much! There are parts that will leave you scratching your head for a bit, but keep reading! Everything will make sense by the end. This author does such a wonderful job telling this story. Such a fitting title for this story! There are some tense issues that make it just a bit clunky at times, but the story itself is so worth the read and the author is working on improvements, so I have no doubt this story will become better and better!! Well done author!

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so tragic but so good!

Broken Halos is such a tragic story full of heartbreak and tragedy. The characters have been through more than anyone would have thought possible and survived. The ranch and the family living there has become a safe haven for the broken and lost. The author has beautifully weaved in the flashbacks to some of their worst times with the present-day life at the ranch. While there are some issues with punctuation and grammar, the story itself is one that I would highly recommend for those who can handle the heavy themes presented throughout. This is not for the faint of heart. I would like to say that I thoroughly enjoyed it, but enjoyed isn’t the right word for the weight of the two stories that have collided at the ranch. I did not want to stop reading. It most definitely captured my attention. Well done author.

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Love this story!

Remembering Annie will keep you on your toes with exciting action scenes and make your toes curl reading about the intense connection between the characters. The description doesn’t do this book justice. It is a rollercoaster ride and a page-turner that will keep you wanting more. Just one more chapter…no, just one more… Okay, fine. One more… A read-through by the author to fix some minor/silly word choice mistakes and clean up the punctuation in the dialogue and this story will be truly amazing. Well done author!

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Let's go!

Excited and honored to be judging this awards. My nerd brain is giggling like a little girl in anticipation. This is such a unique and fantastic experience for budding new writers to get their work evaluated by their peers. I am hopeful that the feedback we judges will be able to provide will help us all to become better writers and gain experience and exposure in the process. I'm ready! Let's go!

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Adorable!!

I will admit that this is not the type of book that I would normally pick up, but when I was given this story to judge as part of an awards here on Inkitt, I approached it with an open mind and I am so incredibly glad that I did. It was a touching, heartwarming, and lovely story. I kept finding myself wanting to read the next chapter, and then the next. For a grinch like me who doesn't normally like Christmas stories, I loved every bit of this. Bravo!

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Such a fun read

I read this story as the judge of an awards here on Inkitt and let me tell you, I was not disappointed. This author has a wonderful and refreshing writing style that manages to take serious topics and give them a dash of humor to keep things real. The characters were well developed and relatable. I enjoyed this story from start to finish. I even appreciated the ambiguity of the ending, as frustrating as it was, it was a super fun way to finish off the story. I would recommend this book to anyone looking to read a well-written and fun teen fiction. Bravo.

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YOU MUST READ THIS!

This book is so spot on and entertainingly informative. Every chapter is an absolutely wonderful and detailed journey through rejection, reviews, feedback, and ultimately acceptance! I eagerly await each new chapter and am looking forward to learning from this author as she journeys toward publication! Well done!

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THIS IS GOLD

Holy cow. Read this book. Just read it. I was blown away by every entry. The dark humor, the ridiculousness, the creepily adorable Orderlies, and the fantastic world that this author has created is genius. This is mind-blowingly good. Easiest 5/5 I will ever give.
Seriously, read this book. Go. Now. Read.

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It has potential!

This story has a lot of potential. The bones are there. It has the potential to be a fun story about a witch on her journey who meets all kinds of obstacles along the way; however, there were so many juicy bits that seemed to be missed opportunities to really enhance this story. The writing style fell a bit flat for me. It had moments where I was really drawn into the story, so the potential is there! I am hopeful that the notes I have given on each chapter will be considered. And I look forward to reading more. Feel free to reach out if you have any questions. There’s something here. It has a ton of potential!

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Such a good story of love and tragedy and hope and despair

Flora Nocturna is truly gifted at building an entire world that her readers can feel fully emersed in. She describes each scene with just the right amount of detail. Trust me when I say that you're not left wanting. Her main characters are relatable and real even though they're fantastical beings. The secondary characters give this story just the right amount of humor and gravity to truly round out an incredible story. I enjoyed this book immensely from start to finish. I wholeheartedly look forward to reading more from this fantastic writer!

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Good read!

Oh my goodness! I just kept thinking, "Nope. Nope. Nope." The gloved hand reaching out...eek! Great storytelling! I enjoyed it a lot. Just a few grammatical issues, but overall a very intriguing story! Can't wait to read more of your work!

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Good story!

I'm a sucker for a good zombie story. I really enjoyed the story itself, but it was a bit hard for me to get past the grammatical issues. A cleanly written book makes for much easier reading. I'd be happy to provide more detailed feedback and pointers if you're interested. For example, any time you're using dialogue, every person gets their own paragraph and every speech should end with a comma inside the quotation marks: "There's a zombie over there," he said. Keep up the great work! Can't wait to read more of this story!

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